religions sell salvation
making propmises hard to keep
confusing the mind withcontradicting belief
the modern way of thinking
seeking refuge in a material world
where everchanging values r givin relief
here we r on the edge of time
minds in confusing are fading out from reality
fatal illusions of life dancing on a volcano
the future generation
will inhrit the idols of our time
at the mercy of perverts
adoring corruption and crime
2006-12-31 09:22:41 · 9 answers · asked by kevin-z 1 in Entertainment & Music ➔ Music
it sucks my balls
2006-12-31 09:25:23 · answer #1 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
I think it's an awesome poem. It does tell what most religions are like in this day in age
2006-12-31 17:25:23 · answer #2 · answered by ? 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Your poem pretty well speaks the truth of what is happening. You should write it to music and let others enjoy it.
2006-12-31 17:28:32 · answer #3 · answered by mandm 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
aiight but even out the rhyme scheme it makes it seem sloppy, just having that last rhyme in the end
2006-12-31 17:30:17 · answer #4 · answered by elites1212 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
.Is good and some what correct, and I has a stile similar to that of the lyrics of "Slayer"
2006-12-31 17:41:47 · answer #5 · answered by ? 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
tanz auf dem vulkan ...dancing on a volcano .... that'd be a good song title.
2006-12-31 17:31:04 · answer #6 · answered by ? 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Its kinda boring.
2006-12-31 17:27:06 · answer #7 · answered by brown eyed girl 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
It's okay
2006-12-31 17:26:19 · answer #8 · answered by yukmouth 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
It's okay
2006-12-31 17:25:04 · answer #9 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋