"The job of achieving liberty and equality has been given to us by the generations before us who were also fighting for liberty and equality and we must never give up on it. "
It doesn't seem right... -_-
2006-12-31 07:35:45 · 21 answers · asked by Anonymous in Education & Reference ➔ Homework Help
Does it have to be just one sentence? It's pretty long as it is. So, given a choice, I'd make the last part another sentence. Then, there's the question of what "it" refers to? So that last part is a little unclear as is. (I'm also reluctant to end a sentence with "on it". I can't remember whether there's actually a rule against it or not, sorry.)
Another tact might be to cut out the phrase "who were also fighting for liberty and equality". Then it's a bit clearer that "it" refers to "the job". Still I like the aspect about "fighting" for liberty and equality. That word seems a little stronger than "merely" achieving.
So, there's lots of ways of rephrasing the sentence. Here's a couple:
"The generations before have given us the job of fighting for liberty and equality. We must never give up." OR "The generations before us fought (I'd use italics here for "fought"
It all depends on what the rest of what you're writing is about, what points you are trying to make and what connotations are important to you. It can be slanted many ways. Try playing with it some more yourself. Take the sentence apart and see if it really says what you want it too. Good luck!
2006-12-31 08:01:40 · answer #1 · answered by books2091 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
The job of achieving liberty and equality has been given to us by the generations before us. They were also fighting for liberty and equality, and we must never give up on it.
2006-12-31 07:48:12 · answer #2 · answered by H A N N A H(: 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
This might work.
The job of achieving liberty and equality has been given to us by the generations before us. They were also back then fighting for liberty and equality and we must never give up on it. "
2006-12-31 07:42:49 · answer #3 · answered by avenash297 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
It is one run on sentence.
"The job of achieving liberty and equality has been given by the generations before us, who were also fighting for the liberty and equality of all men and we must never give up on it. "
2006-12-31 08:34:15 · answer #4 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
The problem of the sentance lies in your trying to connect your ideas without creating run-on sentances. Just something you need to work on. Here is my take of it:
The job of achieving liberty and equality has been given to us by the generations that were also fighting for liberty and equality before us. In following their footsteps, we must never give up on it.
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2006-12-31 08:01:08 · answer #5 · answered by XReader 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Yes, perhaps you should split up the sentence??
For example: The job of achieving liberty and equality has been given to us by generations before us. They also fought for the same objectives. We must never give up on it.
2006-12-31 07:41:46 · answer #6 · answered by Webballs 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
The struggle to achieve liberty and equality has been fought for centuries. However, we must not give up the fight, because every step forward makes life easier for future generations.
after "because," you can put in your own reason.
2006-12-31 07:42:22 · answer #7 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 0⤋
Put "who were also fighting for liberty and equality" inside of commas since that statement is a bit of an aside.
2006-12-31 07:38:38 · answer #8 · answered by Joy M 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
The mandate to protect liberty and equality has been passed on to us by previous generations who fought for these rights.
2006-12-31 07:45:21 · answer #9 · answered by metoo 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
The task of achieving liberty and equality has been left to us by earlier generations who strove for those same things. We must never give up on this task, for our own sakes and for theirs.
2006-12-31 07:38:30 · answer #10 · answered by SteveT 7 · 1⤊ 0⤋