I have a new song for everyone to critique today, any volunteers :) ?

Question

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The song I want critiqued today is "What Would She Say?". Do you like it, love it, hate it, and why, that sort of thing. This is the short version of the song, I just cut it because it just repeats the lyrics. But also, if you haven't critiqued "Nicole's Song", feel free to critique that as well! Thank you all so much!

Joel

Answer 1

The second song is more of a lyric. You have to do 300
hours of rehearsal, before you can hit the notes, no matter
who. All the sound eminating is pure and happy, yet the song
is a world of emotional globs. You can do better, and Nicole
song is sweet. So next stop keep writing. Good hobby and a
good place Freedom for the Allies, to pray for God's home.
What would is um, thanks?

Answer 2

I had to "acquire" the music to take heed to it (in order that which you already know). at the beginning, hats off to you for sharing your music and alluring critique like this. paintings on the enjoying of the guitar slightly extra. The superb strumming replaced into distracting. decide on some effects on the guitar and vocal. needs a refrain and consistent with risk a bridge. Your vocals take me back to the actuality of crimson warm Chili Peppers and that's stable. Like them, your vocals are very rhythmical so get that guitar to proceed to exist beat or get a djembe or something. As a music, we come across out into the music that its some woman yet I unfastened music of this interaction along with her. would desire to advance that up. I supply it 2 stars out of 5 meaning "it particularly is okay". besides the actuality that with a sprint paintings it must be a three out of 5 meaning "i like it". shop on rockin'!

Answer 3

i love both songs. they are both really good.