I want you, but don't deserve you
want to feel you
want to be with you
want you in my life
i need you, but your not around
need your love
need you to be here
need you now
need you always
i love you, please love me back
love you always
love you now
love you forever
i want to know if
you think you could ever want me?
and
Will you ever need me?
Can you ever find it in your heart to love me?
I need to know.
Please tell me.
2006-12-27 14:20:09 · 13 answers · asked by death_of_faries 2 in Arts & Humanities ➔ Other - Arts & Humanities
name it a desperate teenagers plea. not a bad poem keep writing.
2006-12-27 14:29:24 · answer #1 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
This poem tells me that you are thinking of someone that you want to be with, but you are unsure if they want to be with you. It sounds like you are obsessing and repeating the same thing. It would be good to me if you changed it up and took some of the lines out. However, if you like it the way it is...you could call it Obsession.
2006-12-27 14:37:48 · answer #2 · answered by greenlady 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
To be honest, it reads like lyrics from a cheesy love song from the early 90's.
2006-12-27 14:28:14 · answer #3 · answered by Jeremy 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Not a good poem, but it may be great for the lyrics of a song if you can get a fitting tune.
2006-12-27 14:30:59 · answer #4 · answered by Willem V 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
SOunds like a letter that you dropped down line by line. This is catagorized more as Prose than poetry...
It is interesting, Self loathing and everyone loves to watch people put themselves down... It's like a train wreck, you watch, not because it's at all good, but because you just can't help it.
Not a good thing. Polish your work and call this one...
"A work in progress..." It is perfect for it considering!
2006-12-27 14:24:51 · answer #5 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 2⤋
Rumpelstiltskin
2006-12-27 14:22:53 · answer #6 · answered by Neal J 4 · 0⤊ 1⤋
death you might want to work on shortening it a bit and not repeat quite so much but you are getting there try : "love's question"
2006-12-27 15:05:48 · answer #7 · answered by doc 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
" i need love" ..and a poem iz about how u feel so who iz 2 say if its good or not....or "your love" or "with love "
2006-12-27 14:24:01 · answer #8 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
Angelic Love...or Unconditional love....
or simply ....mad about you...or just 'mad'
or I am in love , are you?
2006-12-27 15:21:03 · answer #9 · answered by deevoonay 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I like it! :D But I have no idea for the name though.....
2006-12-27 14:23:01 · answer #10 · answered by trix 1 · 0⤊ 1⤋