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2006-12-27 07:21:51 · 10 answers · asked by LadyAlysse 1 in Arts & Humanities ➔ Books & Authors
It says a lot more about your ex-boyfriend than it does you but in that regards, I would say it is good.
Sorry to hear your last catch was not a keeper. Don't fret though, plenty of fish in the sea.
2006-12-27 07:26:21 · answer #1 · answered by barter256 4 · 1⤊ 0⤋
I love ur poem. Have you considered becoming a poet? I jus broke up with my boyfriend and this poem really soothed me for some reason. I dont know why but thanks for makin my day. Your poem seems like you just poured out your whole heart. Not to worry, there are many others out there in the world. You are bound to find the one that has all of the characteristics you mentioned, someday. And when you do find him, you'll be so happy to be alive and have met such a wonderful person and you will feel as if you were truly blessed. I hope that helps and once again thanks for making my day.
2006-12-27 15:42:47 · answer #2 · answered by Citizen of God's Own Country 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I like the last phrases...the last half or so... they're nice... I dont mean anything insultying by this: but it does seem to drag on a little bit. The beginning provides a needed entry, but sort of... i dont know... it didn't catch my attention right at the beginning, kind of mushy and cautious sounding. When you're writing, dont' be afraid if it sounds a bit outlandish wirtten on paper.
Here's a poem-scrap: .... that fury is futile beyhond these lines/ but the sorrow will live on forever/ if only in my mind.... 'before she dies' (anonymous). it sounds kind of strange but it works, (you kind of need the whole poem to get it, but it's long)
When poe wrote the telltale heart and annabelle lee it probably sounded a bit outrageous aswell.
Its coming from your heart... but the words sound forced.
I love the ending though... it is determined and honest... yet blunt and slightly humorous. Overall... enjoyable. :)
Please, remember i'm not trying to be insulting!!!
2006-12-27 15:34:31 · answer #3 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
Jeez, young lady, it feels right, and I'm a man.
I mean, what you say is also what a man of honor could say to the woman who's betrayed him. I know.
I simply hope to God that you won't take this as an excuse in the future to do to others what wrong befell you this time. You'd ruin the nobility of your feelings.
2006-12-27 15:37:30 · answer #4 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
I really like it. It's very true and from your heart. I could relate to that at one time, but now I think I've finally found him!
2006-12-27 15:29:24 · answer #5 · answered by LeAnne & Enrique 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
cool
2006-12-27 15:24:57 · answer #6 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
wow, thats really good. and your pic is perty.
2006-12-27 15:26:03 · answer #7 · answered by your wonderwall 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
wow thats really good!
2006-12-27 15:25:54 · answer #8 · answered by **StarSinger** 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Could've done better...
2006-12-27 15:26:36 · answer #9 · answered by Grizli 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
ijhk
2006-12-27 15:23:46 · answer #10 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 1⤋