My essay that I'm supposed to be writing for Plymouth State University is "write an essay about a personal achievement that has special meaning to you."
I've chosen to write about the first television show I ever produced getting aired on our local station, but my question is, is it alright to use personal pronouns for this essay? I only ask because one of my english teachers always has us write opinion essays without personal pronouns (ew). So, do you think I can use them for this or not?
Also, if anyone has any ideas on an introductory paragraph, that would be helpful cuz I'm stuck. Thanks.
- Personal pronouns -> I, me, you, etc...
2006-12-27 05:18:03 · 2 answers · asked by StarlightRedemption 3 in Education & Reference ➔ Higher Education (University +)
Yes, it is ok to use personal pronouns, since this essay is about a personal achievement that also happens to be yours. I'd only caution that you not use too many of "I", "my" in the essay: only enough to convey the sense that YOU came up with this idea and you did the work, but not so much that it sounds boastful. Yes, it is a fine line to tow, but judging from the finely craqfted words in your question, you'd do fine. :)
As for intro paragraph: open with a bang. Or at least, to make an impression. E.g. "Lights, camera, action!" , or "Seven PM on Sunday. My show is finally seeing the light of the flicker-tubes acrsoss the xxx town of our local station" - or something more yours.
Sounds like a great accomplishment - Plymouth will be lucky to have you! Good luck!
2006-12-27 05:30:02 · answer #1 · answered by Silvana 5 · 2⤊ 0⤋
I personally don't see any other way to handle the essay effectively without using personal pronouns, but maybe you should approach the person that will be giving out the grades. Does your professor have any contact information?
For an opening paragraph try something like this:
Having my first television show that I diligently worked to produce broadcast to the people of Plymouth has been my greatest personal achievement. Seeing my work come to completion and seeing the success that I had with the program has deeply impacted my vision of myself, my work ethic, and how I interact with those seeking a path similar to mine.
Obviously how your success has impacted you will vary from what I listed, but I think it is a good idea to summarize the points you will cover in your paper in this opening statement. Then attack the points point by point in the body of the paper and once again wrap up your thoughts in the conclusion. Good luck.
2006-12-27 05:37:25 · answer #2 · answered by TR 2 · 1⤊ 0⤋