"Falling Through the Night"
I’m lost in confusion
Falling through the night
Wasting my life for a crazy illusion
Chasing after my dreams, believing it’s right
I have lost my orientation long ago
I’m hearing disillusions’ broken screams
What I’m after I no longer know
I’m following the road to the emperors of ice-creams
Slices of my dreams lay scattered on the floor
Waiting to be put back together again
I’m waiting for somebody to take a peek from the door
To see me jumping off the train
Falling through the night
Disappearing into the furious rain
To my fragmented dreams holding on tight
Leaving some wondering whether I’m still sane
2006-12-26 22:11:10 · 11 answers · asked by Analyst 7 in Arts & Humanities ➔ Other - Arts & Humanities
I like this poem. The line about “…following the road to the emperors of ice-creams” will probably stick with me for the rest of the day…what an image.
It makes me think that we all go through crap…and at some point every dream winds up shattered. When that happens, when we find ourselves lost, our dreams broken, and before we pick up the fragments on move on, we just want someone to look on us and witness that we aimed high and didn’t quite make it.
2006-12-27 04:48:27 · answer #1 · answered by Maddog Salamander 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Did you write this after having a really vivid dream?
You used the word "dream" 3 times.
Keep on writing,ok? I'm not a critic, just asking.
2006-12-27 06:20:25 · answer #2 · answered by Mr Smart 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I’m following the road to the emperors of ice-creams
i like this part.
it's your creation, isn;t it?
it's pretty good.
2006-12-27 06:14:32 · answer #3 · answered by je suis reni 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
good rhyming...though i cant understand y tis sentence..
"I’m following the road to the emperors of ice-creams"
i know it rhymes with screams,but to me,that doesn't fit.that's what i think but hey,i'm no pro..^^
the rest is good.real good.^^
2006-12-27 07:42:06 · answer #4 · answered by bloodworth 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I quite liked it, it reminded me of a poem i wrote when i was a few years younger. Kinda brought back some memories. It's a nice poem.
2006-12-27 06:24:42 · answer #5 · answered by kylie.brand 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I'm not usually even into poetry, but I really liked it! Sounds kinda like my life actually.
2006-12-27 06:45:37 · answer #6 · answered by darkrose_09 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
nice, it would make a very good song
2006-12-27 06:19:33 · answer #7 · answered by Xais 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Not bad! I like!
2006-12-27 06:21:10 · answer #8 · answered by love_momo 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Yes! very nice. :)
2006-12-27 06:15:01 · answer #9 · answered by kikisdragon 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
yeah, but too long na...
2006-12-27 06:18:21 · answer #10 · answered by Richa 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋