read this poem and tell me what should i have to change and how is it?

Question

are you coming over there where
brightness is waiting for you where there
success is also there
would you like to come here
lovers are swimming here
start your new life here
leave the depression where
you are living now right there
don't want me leave me
my door is over here

Answer 1

I think you have just written what ever you feel like but this is not making any proper sense. It is based on good themes but poem should have some sense and its wording should relate to each other i am sorry to say that but i can't see anything in your poem. I know batter one will sure come from you

Answer 2

are you coming over there?
where brightness is waiting for you
where success is right beside you
would you like to come here?
where lovers are swimming near
and to start your new life here
where you leave the depression where
you are living now right here
I don't want you to leave me
my door is over here