Amaising world of wonder.
of innocence and truth.
with roots and seeds under
and the stars above the roof.
always rhythmically chainging
and spinning round and round.
it never stops to rest
evan when peace is found.
who keeps it running smothly?
who keeps the sesons true?
well ovcourse you know the answer,
why it is me & you.
flowing with the curent,
and mooving with the tide,
i hope this world will florish
above & ander time.
(please dont answer me just to coment on my spelling, as i did not finnish school and am only 19)
2006-12-23 20:14:24 · 15 answers · asked by Anonymous in Society & Culture ➔ Mythology & Folklore
I think you should definitely continue writing poetry. Read as many poems written by others, as you can. Study their rhyme and meter, and get a sense of rhythm and the flow of their words.
I think this effort deserves applause.
Your spelling is irrelevant, a spell checker will take care of that.
"I send you love with speed of light. These keys I stroke have magic flight.
And, clever it is that a little mouse, can deliver love from house to house.
But, love they send and love they bring, and "You've got mail" is my favorite ring.
The special love that this one brings, is sent to you on angels wings."
2006-12-23 20:32:03 · answer #1 · answered by nova30180 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Oh ! what a lovely poem i have ever seen I think the poem is lovely i give you4 stars for this if you correct your spelling you would make a great poet.
2006-12-24 02:33:07 · answer #2 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
Great.. you really rock... Good luck i like it really
Maybe we're different, but we're still the same
We all got the blood of Eden, running through our veins
I know sometimes it's hard for you to see
You come between just who you are and who you wanna be
2006-12-23 20:26:51 · answer #3 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 0⤋
I really enjoyed your poem. If you can write poetry such as this, have you thought about keeping a book of the poetry you write and trying to get it published?
2006-12-23 20:25:34 · answer #4 · answered by chelles_insanity 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
oh great. You have knacks on poetry . By your poem you make one thinks about the scenerio., alluding to someone mighty. Well, you can each young people like you to become serious .
2006-12-23 21:43:45 · answer #5 · answered by wilma m 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
with roots and seeds underfoot
it never stops to rest or sleep
i thoink it is great but if you add a cople of words here and there you could make it a more strong rythm...
aww its really great!! congrats!
2006-12-23 21:43:47 · answer #6 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
keep up the good work and never forget to be true to the feeling you have. if you are true to yourself then this will help you continue to keep the real feeling you show. not trying to tell you what to do but please at least considering going back to school and getting your GED then continuing on.
2006-12-24 03:52:34 · answer #7 · answered by Marvin R 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I like it, it gives me a peaceful feeling
2006-12-23 20:27:24 · answer #8 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
By George, I think you've got it! It was good and I injoyed it.
2006-12-23 21:08:11 · answer #9 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
good job! try your hand at a song or two, your thoughts would flow well with a tune. :)
2006-12-23 20:23:12 · answer #10 · answered by spamneggzzz 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋