do you prefer poetry to make concrete sense or to be rather abstract?

Question

my poem doesn't make much sense but do u still like it?
My Selves

We’ll forget in time
the true deception
of appearance
when silver light dangled
under a secret sky.
Footprints of my former self
washed away
reflections of myself,
known only to myself.
Will I wake some morning
with the daylight of trust
filling til I feel fulfilled
with no mountains
mothering me in their breasts?
In a dream,
I’d awaken with poetry
pouring out of my pores
and never ask for more.
In this reality,
the rain of truth
makes my face cold
and a thousand lovers
cannot warm me.
I trace the difference
between trust and truth.
From the unborn pink sky,
sun slips away
into my eyes.
Misleading weather
turns to deliver tears,
mourning moments
murdered by caution.
For conscious thought cannot
coexist with emotion.
Only the strongest strands
strung together
stay to become our strength.

Answer 1

I like it very much - a poem doesn't have to make concrete sense; it just has to evoke emotion and your writing does that. Keep writing!

Answer 2

I'm a scholar of English literature; let me try to answer your question.

Poetry is "the economy of language." This means that you try to express an emotion or an idea or a story with fewer words ~ otherwise you'd just write a short story.

That being said, some poetry is like an onion. You peel it apart a layer at a time, and it reveals itself to you. Or, think of it as a flower bud, beginning to open.

Now, YOUR poem may have deep meaning for you, but that meaning is not easily revealed to the reader. That doesn't mean its a "bad" poem, though.

I've read a lot of poetry by talented writers, but they choose to write in such an abstract way that it's very difficult to understand what they're trying to convey to the reader.

And THAT is part of any piece of prose or poetry - WHO is the intended audience/reader?

Are you writing poetry for children? Lovers? Very educated lovers of literature?

So, present your poems to people who enjoy reading poetry - maybe take a poetry class at a college - and see what THEY say...

Answer 3

My poetry is usually very abstract and displays my feelings and emotions in ways only I can see. Even people who know me very well would read a poem of mine and not really understand what I was feeling or saying. I like this because i cant vent my emotions with out hurting or insulting anyone. However people who also write this way might be able to figure out what I was writing about!

Answer 4

I think your poem is beautiful. :) I understand, or at least, I can relate and analysis what it is about as most writers/readers get a good sense of their material by relating it somehow to events in their lives.

But to answer your question, I like abstract poems, but sometimes they get to be alittle to serious and kind of like, just a writer writing abstract for the heck of it, with really no emotion, so it feels dull, just a stream of words lumped together that sounds intellectual.

BUT your poem is very thoughtful, and I love the imagery and the mixture of trust and thruth and the earthy images. It is really deep without being over the top

A+!!

Answer 5

Nice.

It invokes E.E. Cummings a little bit.

The part with the mountains was particularly strong, and the ending.

Abstract or concrete makes no difference, because some of the best poems use a little bit of both.

Nice work overall.

Answer 6

as i think you already know, when going into writing a poem, do not have "concrete" or "abstract" in mind. rather, have the idea or concept that you are trying to get across in mind and take the path that will best convey that idea or concept. it may end up being concrete or abstract or some of both. the important thing is the articulation of the end goal.

Answer 7

Your poem is beautiful! I wish that I could write poetry like that! I love abstract poems, and I think that many people do. As long as the poem means something to you, that's all that matters, isn't it? Poems are cool because they make you think, and everyone understands them differently.

Answer 8

I like it, it's very abstract, and i like that about poetry, poetry should never make concrete sense, there is always a hidden meaning just waiting for someone to find and understand, and it's different for each person.
God Bless!!

Answer 9

I usually shy away from reading poems posted here for critique, but the first few lines caught my attention. I like the way if begins. I think you have talent. It's evocative.

Answer 10

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