Trapsing through the corridores of time
as the ravon shouts a sound
the wind begain to whistle
cause the wisdome is all around,
i say to you my dear ones
dont listen with your eyes,
for the reality is hidden
deep within your mind.
thi riddle cant be broken
for it keeps the magic safe,
but here is just one token,
before you find your face.
there is a magic hidden
where you may never find
its in the owls wisdome,
its in the dolphins mind.
Above the concept of time
swimming with the tide,
a wise one dose abode,
and is safe with the eagles ride.
2006-12-22 21:25:39 · 7 answers · asked by Anonymous in Society & Culture ➔ Mythology & Folklore
I am torn. There are some lines in it that are really good, and some that are iffy. Over all if you are starting, keep practicing, expecially if you like writing them. Besides they should be to make YOU feel good.
2006-12-22 21:37:15 · answer #1 · answered by 96B233W 3 · 1⤊ 0⤋
You did a pretty good job
with your poem
& if you enjoy writting them keep it up
check some spelling but not with the spell check because half the time it can't spell properly
2006-12-23 05:59:17 · answer #2 · answered by ausblue 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Nice poem ^_^
except a few spelling mistakes it's pretty good...
2006-12-23 05:29:28 · answer #3 · answered by rkc 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
some truth -- some fiction -- some fact -- keep working on this poem and in a few more tries will even be better. good luck and don't give up. as I was taught write to please yourself and no one else. happy writing
2006-12-23 12:18:35 · answer #4 · answered by Marvin R 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Learn to spell, and it would be readable at least.
2006-12-23 09:54:50 · answer #5 · answered by sad kitty 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Loved it! Don't know how old you are, (and it doesn't matter), you have something there.......post some more!
2006-12-23 06:11:19 · answer #6 · answered by INDRAG? 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
nice
2006-12-23 14:42:49 · answer #7 · answered by myangel_101211 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋