For Every Child...
For every child
whose daddy left
sitting there all alone
with nothing but regret.
For every child
who wondered why
the one they loved had to leave
without even saying goodbye.
For every child
who has a guilty heart
please know and never forget
it was not your fault.
For every child
who needs an answer prayer
look to the sky
and see that God is there.
this is only the rough draft, but please be honest
2006-12-22 10:49:44 · 36 answers · asked by Katie 4 in Entertainment & Music ➔ Other - Entertainment
i like it i can relate
2006-12-22 10:51:02 · answer #1 · answered by I love dooneys 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
You know what?:) It's lovely. It's a reflection of a personal belief and idea, and I like it.
If you are looking for consistent rhyming, then I would consider changing the words "heart" and "fault."
Other than that, it's grand. Good job!
2006-12-22 10:52:37 · answer #2 · answered by Bethany 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
It is very good
Thats nice and im pretty sure it would really touch someones hearrt keep writing poems you seem like a great poet to me!!!
2006-12-22 11:15:52 · answer #3 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
Uh... dudette i can totally relate. My dad died when i was little, poem made me almost cry. Anyways very touching. You are a good writer. I loved the ending, totally true. God bless!
2006-12-22 10:52:53 · answer #4 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
it's good--especially for a rough draft! You're a great poet, but you might want to change either heart or fault.
2006-12-22 10:52:37 · answer #5 · answered by pisces14 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I like it. It's very touching and that's only the rough draft? That's really good.
2006-12-22 10:52:17 · answer #6 · answered by Risky_Bizness 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I like it. Because our worlds like that alot now, with more deaths and more children being put up for adoption, and things like that. And for children who did go through things like what you said it could probably be an encouragment to them. good job.
2006-12-22 10:53:48 · answer #7 · answered by bouncy_tigger 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Who thought when I first got stuck on Answers I come across such moving poetry. Great stuff, keep it up.
And Shorty...Good job to you too.
2006-12-22 13:42:53 · answer #8 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
It breaks my heart - something in men must change - the damage they do is - can you think of a word?
2006-12-22 10:53:42 · answer #9 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
its beautiful
here is one of mine
A CHILD A ROSE
a rose,
a rose so red,
bleeding in pain, afraid of death,
no longer in sight, so cold and alone,
a forgotton rose.
a child,
a child so lost,
tears of pain, blurring in her eyes,
alone in the mist, yearning to cry,
a forgotton rose.
no longer afraid,
no one trying to sooth,
courage shines high,
in this moment of truth,
the child a rose,
is what shes become,
the child a rose,
no longer alone.
2006-12-22 10:53:28 · answer #10 · answered by Shorty 4 · 2⤊ 0⤋
i think its good and i hope that the feelings that you are having behind your writing GOD will grant you piece of mind
2006-12-22 10:58:07 · answer #11 · answered by rich d 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋