Im in love with a ghost,
A real person who is fake,
I was tricked into love,
Believing it was fate,
Lie after lie,
I was pulled right in,
Without any signs,
The light grew dim,
I fought for our future,
Tried to make it work,
Like a slap in the face,
I saw the truth and it hurt,
Stil I continued to fight,
For what I believed was true,
Loving someone,
But not knowing who,
So do I give up,
Knowing it was all a hoax,
Even though I'm still in love,
In love with a ghost.
Again about someone who falls in love but afterwards finds out it was all fake but then still cant help but to be in love and doesnt know exactly what to do...
2006-12-21 21:49:50 · 13 answers · asked by gwbgod 2 in Arts & Humanities ➔ Philosophy
The rhymes are all right, but i am definitely impressed by the structure. I believe it captures a complexity of emotions that a lot of people are able to relate to.
Incredible.
2006-12-21 23:50:40 · answer #1 · answered by Mercenary Poet 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
i love your poem!
here is just one of mine.....
stuck in a time warp, reliving the passed
revealing the future, how long will this last?
i feel like I'm stuck, ill never get out.
inside i am sure, out side I'm in doubt.
back to the future, forward to the past,
time goes so slow, but the years go so fast,
this feeling inside me is outside of you,
my fears disappeared and my knowledge has grew!
hope you like, & MERRY CHRISTMAS!
2006-12-21 22:09:37 · answer #2 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
I liked it, it has a good meaning and reads like a lot of thought has been put into it. I like the way you begin and end with the same line. keep up the good work :)
2006-12-21 21:59:50 · answer #3 · answered by jo 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Agenda item #1- Careful, The Martians will accuse you of child molestation. Agenda item #2- The poem was okay.
2016-05-23 15:17:19 · answer #4 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
You could have written that for me.
That situation sort of just happened to me.
I wrote a poem about it too...but mine will make people cry.
I won't share it.
You've got talent though!
2006-12-22 01:37:41 · answer #5 · answered by sapphire_velvet 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Nice poem. Good outlet for getting hurt... I have written a few of those, myself. It really is good.
2006-12-21 21:51:34 · answer #6 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
not hemmingway but not bad either. youre meter is ok. A neat trick i use (when writing my lyrics) is to scribble it all out on paper then try singing/rhyming it out loud. looks ok on paper but try that
2006-12-21 21:54:31 · answer #7 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
its awesome, i just think tht u need to organize it.
like u sed "he light grew dim" too early for my taste, that to me shuld be with the end. but i like ur peice
its greta
but idk, i cant figure the true meaning of it
i think that its just too shallow
there's a story, and a flow, but i think its shallow, too simple
idk
2006-12-22 13:43:39 · answer #8 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
that is very good. you have talent keep writing let me know when the book comes out.
2006-12-21 22:02:48 · answer #9 · answered by George 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Very emotive. You must write more.
2006-12-21 22:14:46 · answer #10 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋