is this a poem????

Question

soul enlightened, crystal tears in the eyes, shining moon in his heart, leaping from the sky, destined to fall softly, life beginning from a step, ending with a cry, leaping steps going down, coming into focus this hard ground, distant from himslef half way, life stops dead, but a crystal tear in the eye, as his floor comes to him as he stands and crys, power seeping taking shape, shifting steps changing paths, taken by a hand wiped away, one clear tear left to fade, different shape different man, holding close what he has dear, losing slowly parts of his sky, feathers fall as he forgets to fly, his crystal tear takes off, life shining in its reflection, losing ones self in a sea of dream, floating adrift in a never ending dream, love aheadhe see's light, suddenly finds a reason to fight, taken by a hand shown how to fly destined to crack his ground he is living, crystal tear falls high, seeps from his sky, broken by a love

i dont know if it is a poem i was lost in my writing

Answer 1

no its just a lot of random nonsense from what I read (the first line). if you don't catch peoples attention in the first line they won't read on

Answer 2

Good evening.
Sometimes a person may not be aware if somethig that is written fits a certain catagory. such as a "poem" as you have asked. I fel that you indeed wrote this not only from your mind but your heart, continue to write in the manner that you have written this and do not fear if anyone thinks of it as a poem, ect Express yourself in any manner you wish by getting lost, Too soon you will find yourself by seeing that others will like your work A very good thing i would think, would be to place yourself as each person you write about. express your feelings on how you write through your words your mind will wonder until the right words and your text is right for "you". I could "see" not only your words, but also the meaning of them and even saw you in each person as you wrote. I feel you have much talent. I would say to expand each separate occasion within your writing Goodluck
just remember to write about all things and not just sad ones.
" A smile with care keeps the writing fair"
but a writing of Love is something we share!!!
there is a gain for every loss we have!!!!!!
Let the loss be a gain, not to ponder but to write about..

Answer 3

I believe it is the beginings of a poem, albeit a stream of consciousness one. If you broke it up into stanzas as you have done with commas it would look more like one. Perhaps you should find a different way of describing a tear as well - you've used that word a lot. I like the imagery though - but it's a little hard to read. Try cutting it down to size and making it more concise to keep your reader's attention.

Answer 4

No. This is a stream of consciousness. Poetry, like anything else worthwhile in life, requires discipline and form. You have an idea here. How you now develop it may, after work and polish, turn it into a poem. Poetry don't come natural, mate, otherwise everyone would be doing it. It requires effort and practice, same as everything else that has value. Please don't let this put you off.

Answer 5

I believe you get to choose if it is a poem or not. It may not be any exact form of poetry, but you as the writer, know what the intention of the piece is and ultimately have the power over the decision.

Answer 6

you just need to cut the sentences in the right places so that each line will show an image. :) a little more revising and you can get a great poem! you're on the right track, dear.

you can ask help from your poetry teacher so that he or she can critique your work.

Answer 7

It's definitely "free verse," but poems ALWAYS have some sort of structure, rhythm, words that sound good together, etc.. What you have is a big jumbled mess.

Answer 8

you need to work at this
break it up into easy to digest chunks..it has potential
the people who say it has no promise have not read ping....by Samuel Beckett
You have a very good start..you need to think of line breaks, form..etc...and are you going for an atmospheric poem..in which case..try to echo what you want to put across
Re-draft..you have a good first draft,...with brill images...work on it!!!!!

Answer 9

I thought it was a poem, but having read the other answers I'm not so sure now

Answer 10

It not poem no rime, poem no rime is crap, poem mi cuntery crap language not flow, not like brittish,
Mary hed a littel lem
he couldn't it stop gruntin,
down garden paf she taked it
an kickt it bleedin rump in
is proper poem it rime proper, it story tel.
it won off Shakespear best poem.
Shakespeare great men. he rite reel good, Julis Seizer he rite
Infamy, Infamy, dey all got it in for me, is magic.