We are not how we used to be.
We never talk anymore.
When we do talk we're always fighting
But in my heart i know i still love you oo its so true.
But i know its time to say good bye. (I know you know it too)
'cuz we are both not satisfy.
I remember the beginning of our realationship.
We were so in love.
Time passed by and we're falling apart.
We are not how we used to be.
We never talk anymore.
When we do talk we're always fighting
Everytime i think about saying good bye
To you it makes me wanna cry.
You were my first and my one and only.
But we grew apart.
We both knew it.
But we both were way to scared to say anything about it.
We are not how we used to be.
We never talk anymore.
When we do talk we're always fighting
Its just time to say good bye...
2006-12-21 12:25:35 · 13 answers · asked by Anonymous in Entertainment & Music ➔ Polls & Surveys
Its good. Although I wouldnt put it on blast on the interent unless it was copywritten.
2006-12-21 12:38:03 · answer #1 · answered by Kandy 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
dont listen to some of these people..your writing is GREAT!..way better than what id write i can only do fanfics mainly
and you really put forth the effort which makes it all the more better..its personal to you it was from your heart..writing from the heart is always the best..it doesnt seem to be much of a song though more of a poem but maybe if i heard it i could tell that it is a song, its hard to tell when youre reading song lyrics you know. just be careful about posting original writing, i hope you were willing to accept the risk of people stealing it cuz that can happen..
with a few improvements/revising itll be awesome. you might wanna take the poster above me's advice..what they wrote sounds like it would have more flow.
2006-12-21 20:45:59 · answer #2 · answered by Garbo's snowflake 6 · 0⤊ 1⤋
I didn't catch the melody - needs another verse and a melancholy guitar solo. - get rid of relationship in the 1st verse find some other way to say it -
how about ( i'll try anything once)
In my heart I know I love you
(back up singers) - ooo its so true
Now its time to say good- bye
(bu singers) - I know you know it too
Remember us when at the start
(bu)we were so in love
but time has passed and now we part
(bu) we were so in love
chorus/ bridge
we are not who we should be
we never talk any more
now we fight , just can't agree
but we were so in love
2006-12-21 20:43:59 · answer #3 · answered by Norman 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
i'm not trying to be mean here, but this is what i think.
1.it sounds too much like a story
2.it's not catchy at all, i cant imagine anyone singing a line or 2 of that over and over again.
3.it just doesn't work.
4. even if it did work, it was pretty dumb to post it on here, cause if it's good, someone's gonna steal it from you.
5.there are too many songs about that topic anyway.
NEXT!
2006-12-21 20:31:44 · answer #4 · answered by ? 5 · 0⤊ 1⤋
I really like it because it is about time that people realize that some things are not meant to be and it is better to part as friends then to tear each other apart....YOU GO...I really think more people should take your attitude.
2006-12-21 20:30:20 · answer #5 · answered by ஐAldaஐ 6 · 1⤊ 0⤋
I think it has very good lyrics and is catchy the lyrics are great good job keep writing songs!
2006-12-21 20:28:30 · answer #6 · answered by valley1800 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
its really cute!!! if this is bout ur love life than i hope everything really works out!!! good luck and jus remeber no boy is worth your tears...and the one who is wont make u cry!!!
2006-12-21 20:33:59 · answer #7 · answered by urzalwayz5646 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I think that you stole it from Nelly Furtado.
2006-12-21 20:32:37 · answer #8 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
its alright. but make it more songy right now its more of a poem and its bloody obvius its about your boyfriend or husband
2006-12-21 20:28:09 · answer #9 · answered by ♫That'll be the Day♫ 6 · 0⤊ 1⤋
very nice. you seem to have a talent for writing. good for you!
good luck!
2006-12-21 20:28:29 · answer #10 · answered by Bubuchachum 6 · 0⤊ 1⤋