Tell me does it sound alrigh so far?? I'm not done it yet.?

Question

"Devin, I giving you part of my imagination, I trust you with it, please take vast care of it." I said to a complete stranger, but somehow I knew her name. " It can not be replased, it's an imagination."
" Randi, Randi, Randi." And she new my name as well. " I will take care of it, why wouldn't I?" She chuckled. " As you said you trust me. I couldn't imagin why I wouldn't." She began to laugh hard, I think she was laughing at her own joke, of putting 'imagin' in her sentece, but I didn't find it very amusing so I played along. Then she soundenly stoped laughing, and she jently put her hand on my shoulder and she came close to me and wispered something in my ear. I cound'nt make out what she said, but before I could ask her what she said she was gone, almost like the wind had swisped her away.
Suddenly I was surronded by tall fresh green grass that towered over me. I could barly see the sky above me. I looked down to see, not your everyday oradanary ground, the ground was like a cloud, white and fluffy. The wind began to blow hard, my hair was brushing against my face. The wind began to wisper something, but what?
" Run, Run!" I was pretty shure thats what it wisperd to me. "RUN!" It had gotten louder, I was scared, so I did as the wind told me, I ran, I ran as fast as I could. The grass was smacking me in the face hard. Roots began to imerge from the ground gabbing at my ankles and the grass was trying to wrap it self around me, but kept on running, not stoping for a breth. The roots and the grass never gave up, and finily I fell. The roots were wraping around my feet, the grass was getting tighter around me, I struggled to remove the roots, but the grass was getting tighter, and soon I could feel blood. I was screaming and crying for help, but I knew no one was around.
*****

I jumped, and woke up. " It was only a dream." I looked down at my ankles, they were bleeding, even my arms were bleeding. " O my god." I gasped, and almost fainted at the sight of blood. I sliped off my bed, and walked across the floor, blood was dripping off me and onto the floor. I turned on the tap to the tub, so I could clean my self off. I couldn't go to school looking like this. I stepped into the tub, as the hot water hit a wound it would sting. I looked at the cuts and they wern't very deep. Infact, they were closing right before my eyes. I couldn't belive it no cut could heal that fast, not one. Soon my skin was back to normal. When I was done my bath I unplugged the tub, and I watched the red water go down the drain. I walked out the door and noticed the blood that was on the floor was gone. Even the blood on my bed was gone. I was cunfused. I looked in the mirror and saw not even a mark of what just happened, not even one scare.

Answer 1

I put it through spell check for you. I used Microsoft Word. It is best you finish it on your own and have your English/ language arts teacher proof read it for you.


"Devin, I am giving you part of my imagination, I trust you with it, please take great care of it." I said to a complete stranger, but somehow I knew her name. " It can not be replaced, it's an imagination."
" Randi, Randi, Randi." Somehow she knew my name as well. " I will take care of it, why wouldn't I?" She chuckled. " As you said you trust me. I could't imagine why I wouldn't." She began to laugh hard, I think she was laughing at her own joke, of putting 'imagine' in her sentence, but I didn't find it very amusing so I just played along. Then she suddenly stopped laughing, and she gently put her hand on my shoulder and she came close to me and whispered something in my ear. I couldn’t make out what she said, but before I could ask her what she said she was gone, almost like the wind had wisped her away.
Suddenly I was surrounded by tall fresh green grass that towered over me. I could barely see the sky above me. I looked down to see, not your everyday ordinary ground, the ground was like a cloud, white and fluffy. The wind began to blow hard; my hair was brushing against my face. The wind began to whisper something, but what?
" Run, Run!" I was pretty sure that’s what it whispered to me. "RUN!" It had gotten louder, I was scared, so I did as the wind told me, I ran, I ran as fast as I could. The grass was smacking me in the face hard. Roots began to immerge from the ground gabbing at my ankles and the grass was trying to wrap it self around me, but kept on running, not stopping for a breath. The roots and the grass never gave up, and finally I fell. The roots were wrapping around my feet, the grass was getting tighter around me, I struggled to remove the roots, but the grass was getting tighter, and soon I could feel blood. I was screaming and crying for help, but I knew no one was around.
*****

I jumped, and woke up. " It was only a dream." I looked down at my ankles, they were bleeding, and even my arms were bleeding. " O my god." I gasped, and almost fainted at the sight of blood. I slipped off my bed, and walked across the floor, blood was dripping off me and onto the floor. I turned on the tap to the tub, so I could clean my self off. I couldn't go to school looking like this. I stepped into the tub, as the hot water hit a wound it would sting. I looked at the cuts and they weren’t very deep. In fact, they were closing right before my eyes. I couldn't believe it no cut could heal that fast, not one. Soon my skin was back to normal. When I was done my bath I unplugged the tub, and I watched the red water go down the drain. I walked out the door and noticed the blood that was on the floor was gone. Even the blood on my bed was gone. I was confused. I looked in the mirror and saw not even a mark of what just happened, not even a single scar."

Answer 2

Well, this piece is full of misspelled words, poor grammar, incomplete sentences, wrong use of commas, etc. I suggest that you go back to the beginning and make some corrections so it's easier to read. It does show a vivid imagination--the basis for a good sci-fi horror.

Answer 3

I.. I love it! I mean I am really picky about my books but I love it. Tell me what happens. Is Josie dead. If she is dead I am going to cry. Write more! This is no joke I am in love with this book! Does it have a title?

Answer 4

Yiiiikesw!
And i thougth me being 2 inches tall was bad enougth!

Answer 5

its good but a lot of grammar mistake and a little confusing but if you edit it, it will come out great!

Answer 6

OMFG, Go to the hospital before you die! quick hurry.

Answer 7

i never read it but thanks for the 2 points also

Answer 8

yAWN