what do you think? Criticism welcomed.
Algebra Class
Detached, blurry
like a dream
Pinch me
I won't wake up
thoughts
swirling in my head
eyes almost
drooping shut
useless numbers and letters
shape shifting to whatever
vampires and werewolves
blueberries and chocolate
doodling in the margins
stick figure murder
bell rings
good night
2006-12-21 06:16:23 · 13 answers · asked by teenwriter_25 2 in Arts & Humanities ➔ Books & Authors
I don't really hate algebra. In fact, I like math. It's just my teacher's voice is sooo monotonous. I didn't understand graphing parabolas and he started talking about Bruce Wayne and Batman. I mean...what the heck??
2006-12-21 06:24:06 · update #1
By the way, thanks everyone! I appreciate the feedback!
2006-12-21 06:28:17 · update #2
you capture your attitude well, but I think if you lengthened it, maybe added a few stanzas that were longer than 2 lines, giving more description of what your teacher does, etc, it could be even better.
2006-12-21 06:30:47 · answer #1 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
WOW. I loved it. that's not cliche in any respect and that i love the little bit of irony. there is not some thing incorrect with darkish poems.. this has a dismal area yet yet its very uplifting. The absence of any punctuation maked the element of p.c. even extra glaring. i love the imagary and rythm and scheme you chosen to apply. and under no circumstances many human beings understand, the shorter the poem the harder that is to furnish it a deeper meaning yet you captured the essence of loss in an person-friendly and captivating way. save up the coolest artwork and save posting.
2016-12-01 01:32:19 · answer #2 · answered by abigail 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
It's a very good atmosphere poem. You definitely have some talent. I wish you hadn't given so many background explanations though. Japanese poetics has a wor, "yugen" meaning mystery, ineffability. You took away much of that by explaining. But the poem in itself is good. Keep it up!
2006-12-21 06:38:35 · answer #3 · answered by Cristian Mocanu 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I felt the same way you do while in algebra class. I had a teacher like that too..really good poem...u have talent..:)
2006-12-21 06:26:50 · answer #4 · answered by Hill 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
lmao thats nice. It really made me imagine the words as like a animation in my head. Keep it up girl
2006-12-21 06:25:12 · answer #5 · answered by meka g 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
This is supremo! It's your innocence in your voice still where it hasn't been manipulated yet. It is a good poem.
2006-12-21 06:28:13 · answer #6 · answered by Friend 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
it's good and if u still need help in algebra i can help I'm in 8Th but I'm taking Geo and aced algebra email is tazertanner@yahoo.com
2006-12-21 06:53:16 · answer #7 · answered by Tader 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
LOL! Tells the truth! I hate algebra. Two thumbs up!
2006-12-21 06:19:30 · answer #8 · answered by Lynne 2 · 0⤊ 2⤋
Dats pretty good...You must ace in English!!
2006-12-21 06:24:28 · answer #9 · answered by Lynne 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Very good poem.
2006-12-21 17:28:15 · answer #10 · answered by Sqeekers 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋