"How Fast"
how fast life changes
no one really knows.
how fast people change
can be pridicted
how fast our fates change
is some how in our hands
how fast our heart changes
is a matter of our choice
how fast a life is concieved
is a matter of few seconds
how fast a life is taken
is a matter of split seconds
how fast our childhood passes
is a matter of how we age
how fast our life ends
is a matter of how we spend our time
how fast happy times pass
is a matter of how we preserve them
how fast sadness passes
is how we deat with it
how fast you fall in love
is a matter of who you love
how fast your learn to hate
is a matter of who taught you hatered
how fast your wounds heal
is how u you take the pain
how fast your scars fade
is a matter of how fast you forget them
how fast you absorbe these words of mine
is a matter of how fast u accept reality.
2006-12-21 06:05:34 · 10 answers · asked by Neha 1 in Arts & Humanities ➔ Books & Authors
Who cares? When you write poetry, it is a pure expression of yourself. You are the only one who is supposed to know what sense it makes. The reader is suppossed to make their own meanings out of your words. Just like music...grammar and sense are thrown out. I do think it is beautiful.
Incidentally though, if you are intending to be a poet, be forewarned it is like being an artist: you aren't famous, and your work isn't priceless, 'till your dead. That is another sad reality....
2006-12-21 06:13:58 · answer #1 · answered by aa_weber 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
how fast or slow life changes
can be sometime be predicted by
how fast our fates change and that
is some how in our own hands
most of the time, but not always
there are outside circumstances
and situtions and influences
and things that we don't know
or ever understand that intervene
how fast our own heart changes
is a matter of our own choice
most of the time, unless we are in
extreme emotional positions
sometimes beyond our own control
how fast a life is concieved
is a matter of few seconds
sometimes and sometimes
it never happens for some
people at all even if they want it
and that is the way it is meant
to be if they like that or not
how fast a life is taken
is a matter of split seconds
depends sometimes people
die slow grueling death
and the medical industry
keeps them from getting
on with it and it destroys them
how fast our childhood passes
is a matter of how we age
no this is not always true,
how we age can be influenced
by our childhoods though
how fast happy times pass
is a matter of how we preserve them
yeah I think this is true
how fast sadness passes
is how we deal with it
not just that though
there are other variables too
how fast you fall in love
is a matter of who you love
no it is a matter of who you are
not who you love
how fast your learn to hate
is a matter of who teaches you hatered
yeah to a large extent
how fast your wounds heal
is how u you take the pain
partially and what you do to
make things right again
how fast your scars fade
is a matter of how fast you forget them
Yes and no, one must forget and yet
remember too for the lesson that they can
use to help themselves and others with, but
not to dwell on it in a negative way and
not to make it the most important thing
how fast you absorbe these words of mine
is a matter of how fast u accept reality.
what is reality to you? nothing on this net
is ever really real is it, can't and don't
people play games on here all the time?
2006-12-21 14:21:47 · answer #2 · answered by Friend 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
The concept is good. There are some very cool lines in there, but if I were you I would go at it with a chain saw and see how much better it CAN be.
The lines about how fast a life is conceived and the split seconds it takes to be taken floors me! Excellent!
2006-12-21 14:14:22 · answer #3 · answered by Terrigrrl 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Very nicely done. You may want to consider submitting it to a legitimate forum like Poetic Diversity: http://www.poeticdiversity.org/ for consideration of publication. Good Luck!
2006-12-21 14:11:15 · answer #4 · answered by Walking on Sunshine 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Agree with Tunesmith
2006-12-21 14:14:23 · answer #5 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
If by "Does my poem make sense?" you mean "Do my poem's messages make sense?", then yes. If you mean "Does my poem make sense grammatically?", then it could be better.
Just a bit of criticism; try going over each line to make sure each sentence flows and doesn't sound too awkward.
Good luck!
2006-12-21 14:12:24 · answer #6 · answered by Tunesmith 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
it would make more sense if you spelt properly
2006-12-21 15:20:47 · answer #7 · answered by burtbb0912 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
awww... that's cute
2006-12-21 14:09:37 · answer #8 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
good stuff
2006-12-21 14:16:43 · answer #9 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
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2006-12-21 14:07:54 · answer #10 · answered by metallicat89 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋