Please critique and decipher my poem?

Question

When we were women
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Here in this time and always
you are the loved and the looked on
it is in you to be wanted
all this is laboured to be
distant - the distance we
drew out for reason
that ugly season that suffocates
all the others of our life now
we who rush the river
where went that ease
with which we did everything
without prelude or result
but with honesty and love.

Urgel I think you are right!

I was never sure what i was writing about when I wrote this as I write without thinking.

I thought perhaps it was about women,perhaps I was wrong.

Answer 1

Very Nicely Written

I'd say that the the message is about why do women behave as they do? They all Want to be Wanted but reaching their Goals is not Easy. What Happened to the Simpler times when women could Just go about their business without having Hidden Agendas or trying to get their way. They could just do simple acts of kindness as opposed to trying to manipulate others.

Well Thats My take on it but Hey! Ive known some pretty rotten ladies lol :p

Take Care

Answer 2

Check out e.e. cummings. Though thinking he might not have capitalized the first word.

Your poems sounds to me like you and another person got along together quite easily.

Answer 3

It's a good poem.I think you can't decipher a poem because they are not written in any code language. You poem is as straightforward as it can be.

Answer 4

Very beautifully written!

I think its wonderful, with a lot of reasons behind it. You have a honest way with words... Keep on writing!

Stay safe.

Answer 5

its a really good poem, it had me thinking. i think its about the past, and how distant it seems with age, but poems mean different things to different people