ENGLISH help!!! (PLEASE ASAP)?

Question

can somebody help me out.

im writing a persuasive essay about the negatives on peace keeping in Canada ...my main arguments are that peace keepers get killed, there have been a significant drop in peacekeeping efforts in Canada and peace keeping has not significantly changed the world (the number of wars have not decreased)


i was wondering if you could give me a good introduction sentence and a good thesis statement because well English is not my strong point...thanx for all your help in advance... please no dumb comments thank you.

i am talking about Canada being peacekeepers around the world

Answer 1

The introductory sentence should pretty much sum up the idea of your essay. For example, in a report about Venus, the report contained facts about how inhospitable it was. Here we have my opening paragraph:

If one plans to go to Venus, they should forget about it. It is hot, it is acidic, and it doesn't carry any oxygen. Venus would be a horrible place to live.

If you maybe wrote about the dangers of being a peacekeeper in Canada, it might make a good starter. (I'm sure my English teacher would kill me for typing that like I did.)

The main point should be included. What would be the main turnoff for you if you wished to become a peacekeeper? For me, it would have to be the large chance that I might get a bullet through my head. Therefore:

Peacekeeping in Canada is costing lives.

Then:

There are not many people supporting it, anyway.

Finally:

The efforts are mostly fruitless.

To wrap it up:

Peacekeeping in Canada is not worth the human costs.

Tada! Just remember to always use an opening sentence that will grab the reader's attention.

Answer 2

Do you mean the peacekeeping efforts OF Canada? I don't think there are any wars there right now.

I would change your second point - it isn't very persuasive. Maybe comment on how peacekeeping is expensive or something. Bring in the taxpayers!

The thesis should just say something like "Peacekeeping efforts are not good for Canadians" (be more eloquent than that, though). Your topic is pretty much your thesis, you just need to think of a good way to state it.

For an introductory sentence, just start super-general. Something about how many peacekeeping efforts are on in the world right now, maybe. Then narrow your focus in each sentence after that until you hit your thesis.

Good luck.

Answer 3

what are you talking about, there are no peace keepers in canada except for the police. there might be canadian peace keepers in other places around the world getting killed but certainly none in canada. what do you think canada is full of terrorist (that must be where they are all coming from lol) seriously your english isnt lacking its your IQ

Peacekeepers just another way to say military? What benefit do they actually serve? Who benefits from the use of Canadian peace keeping forces? Who suffers when they die in combat? just some questions that if you answer them it may help you develop an opening statement, I'm not going to give it to you straight away.

In your introduction sentence, you should try and just state what issue you are discussing. In your thesis statement, you are stating your position. Wrapped into the rest of your first paragraph should be the main points you are going to make, and then you expand on those main points in the body of your essay.

Hope that helps!

PS: I really don't like what the first person wrote. You should be allowed to ask for help on here just like you would ask your teacher for help, but this is less embarrassing since it's anonymous. I personally will not give you the answer, but rather how to arrive at the answer on your own.


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villagevoice.com/blogs/bushbea...

Answer 4

In your introduction sentence, you should try and just state what issue you are discussing. In your thesis statement, you are stating your position. Wrapped into the rest of your first paragraph should be the main points you are going to make, and then you expand on those main points in the body of your essay.

Hope that helps!

PS: I really don't like what the first person wrote. You should be allowed to ask for help on here just like you would ask your teacher for help, but this is less embarrassing since it's anonymous. I personally will not give you the answer, but rather how to arrive at the answer on your own.

Best wishes,
B.A.

Answer 5

Peacekeepers just another way to say military? What benefit do they actually serve? Who benefits from the use of Canadian peace keeping forces? Who suffers when they die in combat? just some questions that if you answer them it may help you develop an opening statement, I'm not going to give it to you straight away.

Answer 6

Hello.

How about this?

"The world is for us to take good care of, not only for ourselves but for the future generation."

Good luck in your studies. Your sentence structure is well done. Keep up the good work.

Answer 7

what are you talking about, there are no peace keepers in canada except for the police. there might be canadian peace keepers in other places around the world getting killed but certainly none in canada. what do you think canada is full of terrorist (that must be where they are all coming from lol) seriously your english isnt lacking its your IQ

Answer 8

www.columbia.edu/~chalmers/AN.html -
hnn.us/roundup/archives/12/2004/10 -
villagevoice.com/blogs/bushbeat/archive/2005_12.php

Answer 9

Nine is the ninth number.

Nein means no in german.

Nein.

Answer 10

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