Do you like how this novel sound so far?

Question

I wrote a story in first person about a girl name Nicole who was 15 when she was at a party and got drunk and she had sex with a boy named Dimitri. About a few months later she finds out she is pregnant and the day she tells him , she faints and he find out at the hospital because she textedd him on the school bus about it and he told the people at 911 about it. When she wakes up he tells her the baby is fine and he askes her is there anythign he can do for her. She repiles with 'Yes, take care of this baby with me, will be enough.'. Two months later she is in school and gets busted for writing a note in class. Her friend Tianna gave her a gift and her 'big brother' who is also her sister Ashley's boyfriend askes her what's in the box but she wouldnt let him see it, and so he follows her home when she openes it inside is some stuff for the baby. In her fifth month she find out its girl...

Do you like it and what do you think shoudl be added to the story?

I know it will probably be more targeted for teens. I am not sure if I shoudl continue writing it though.

Answer 1

Clearly you are intending that this be targeted at a teenage audience, as this is of no interest to adults.

The teenage book market is a big one, but, given that that market is almost exclusively dedicated to 'fantasy' (J.K Rowling, Terry Pratchet et al) I think you must forget any idea you may have that a book like this would interest any publisher. TV fills that niche.

Write for your own pleasure though.

Answer 2

Hmm... drunken sex with a guy at a party who turns out to be a supportive, caring father?
I don't think so.
You obviously have a lot of imagination, and the plotline is somewhat solid... ish, but it really doesn't interest me so far. I'm a teen, and I've read enough books on this subject to turn my brain to mush. Give me something I haven't seen before.
Even though you probably won't want to publish this, here are some tips in case you do:
1.) Believable characters. Show thoughts, show emotions. Be real and let your characters say what people would say, not what people reading the story would expect them to say.
2.) Growth for the main character. Not just "la-la-la-la I'm having a baby!" What if she wanted to get an abortion, but at the last minute backed out? What if she did get an abortion? What if her mother kicked her out?
3.) Bigger scope. Make it a believable setting, with people outside of your control. Bigger setting= more excitement.

Keep in mind that this is all personal opinion, and good luck with your writing!

Answer 3

Begin writing, tell the story, then stop. The idea of writing is to just let the story roll out -- I can't say what you should add or not because it's YOUR story. I've written two novels myself and am working on my third, and sometimes as I write the characters take off in directions I didn't quite expect. When your characters surprise you the author, they're likely to stick with the reader better because even though we're inculcated to "expect the unexpected", we're still impressed and startled when we are.

I like what you've got here; let's see where it goes. THEN worry about revising it.

Answer 4

I'd like to encourage you to continue with your story. It sounds like something my granddaughter (age 12) would probably enjoy reading. I can see where this story is going in my own head but maybe you shouldn't take it there, I'm thinking. The stand by your man theory is definitely most of the time a fairy tale. I think I'd take a twist at it during the birth, he skips out and she has to handle this on her own. And why? Because I want would this character to show what a strong person she has grown to be...and maybe her friends, who do stand by her...show her that really, a man is great to have in your life (they come and they go LOL...what a pun! LOL) but a great friend generally will last forever. It's your story, and I can see that it has possibilities...its up to you, the author (doesn't that sound just so cool?) to do with it what you'd like. Keep writing! I think you have potential.

Answer 5

you've provided us a synopsis, not a novel. The difference is that you'd have to actually give us the story, rather than just tell us what the story is about. Very few topics, other than sex, are inherently interesting. It is the novelist's job to make topics interesting. So a novel is as much the author's stance and voice as it is the plot. Give us the opening page, then we'd be better equipped to answer your question.

Answer 6

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Answer 7

absolutely keep going. even if you think the end result is horrible, you have the experience of having written it. my advice (but considering my background, my perspective is biased): keep in mind 1-4 (or more) different significant values/messages/morals that both are important to you and that are relevant to your work as you are writing, and try to wrap each episode of the novel around one of those values/messages/morals. throw some variety in by having characters go against the values/messages/morals with an end result that could prove that your stance is the "correct" one. but keep "correct" loosely in your mind. remember, in art, no one is correct.

Answer 8

Keep going. The path may be dangerous. It may deceive you, but never deviate, keep on going to the bitter end.
You never know, you might find a casket of buried treasure.

Answer 9

it's ok, i guess.