these lyrics i wrote rate them please..1 to 10.. btw its rock so if you dont like rock music ya kno?

Question

okay the sound a lot better with the music...its rock kind of screamo at some points(but not very) and very unique..im the singer this band..i just wanted to know if people would acctually want to listen to us and if you like the lyrics..

trust that no one knows why
still caught up in their time
but we all go down slowly
not saying goodbye
its all careful encryption
all we're tryin to say
and we don't put it out there
only say we're okay

so look at me now
cause im staring straight through you
In the heat of this crowd
can you see through me too?
i can tell
its getting darker
yet still remains shallow
are we moving any further
cause i really cant tell

these instructions to you
you deal with your doubt
and make peace with the dirt
get over yourself
and expect it to hurt
move on from the crowd
when they'll always be waiting
ignore every comment
but know where they're hanging

its different just said
when its actually done
in your physical pain
you not able to run
but when everythings finished
dont just walk away
revenge isn't karma
so come on and take

but nows no time
to start
dont take back
what you've spoken
cause your defeated, black heart
isn't gonna stay broken

these instructions to you
you deal with your doubt
and make peace with the dirt
get over yourself
cause its all it to hurt
move on from the crowd
when they'll always be waiting
ignore every comment
don't forget who they're hating

trust that no one knows why(no one knows why)
so look at me now(look at me)
its different just saying(its different)
revenge isn't karma

yes you!
cause all this doubt
and you planted this dirt
your over yourself
yet you make it hurt worse
stuck in the crowd
and you'll always be waiting
making your comments
but soon you'll be hanging.

no we havent recorded we havent performed much either we pretty much just in the jamming stage lol

i am really into making people fall in love with the old punk, rock, metal again =D but we are still really young tho...and we add our flare to our stuff not just the origional soundy feely thing

Answer 1

those are really deep, i like it a lot! uhhhh......8.5 for me.

do you have a recording of this or anything???? I wouldn't mind hearing it.

Answer 2

Hmmmm.....GREAT lyrics!! I wouldn't rule out trying the "soundy, feely" effect just yet, though. Check out a classic Rock icon album by KISS, titled "Destroyer". Listen to the whole thing and note how ballsy it was for them to experiment with different sounds---that worked so well, the album went QUAD PLATINUM. So, don't tell me it isn't about the album sales.....

You're focused on being a household name, taking your art and having the entire planet know it, take it to heart....and to do that, you HAVE to aim BIG.

Back to this song: Try tuning your guitars for a bluesy wail 70s sound. I'd also get real ballsy and add a 12 string guitar and go ONE BETTER and add a 8 string bass (yes, they're out there).

Go with a G, C, D riff on the lead ( if you have a rhythm guitarist, have them intricately pick a riff w/ a echo sound ); the extreme 8 string bass can follow up tight w/ a G, E, C (quick riff down to) D.

Need more on this? Check out Leftoverture by Kansas and/or April Wine's album "The Nature Of The Beast" ( listen for the title track and/or "Sign Of The Gypsy Queen"). But why stop there??? If you REALLY want to step one up to the plate, I'd also check out the entire "Allied Forces" album by Triumph.

Somewhere in these suggestions, is the totally cool original music for THIS song you wrote! Trust me: I used to be in the business; I know.

BTW....on the 10 scale (10 being the best ) you get a 15; 25 extra if you pull this off right. I somehow feel you will do it and I'll be keeping an ear out on the radio to you guys.

Answer 3

Yeah i actually do like that. However, its make or break with the music side.

How many people really really listen to the lyrics when they hear a song on the radio? Usually its the music that gets people hooked to a song first. Sometimes bands which sound awesome, you go read there lyrics and its like huh?! that makes not much sense (Kings of Leon) but it sounds great! So the music is real important too.

Answer 4

truthfully, that one verse within the core is not extraordinarily dangerous, however I could nonetheless paintings on it since there are too many rhymes, and the albatross factor is a bit too repetitive, even for a Punk or Metal tune, however I would not toss it but, simply hold modifying. But hi there it would paintings, contemplating one in every of Iron Maiden's songs in which "7th son of a 7th son," is repeated one million instances. BUT, that lyric had an excessively deep that means because the album is a inspiration and has the identical title as that verse.

Answer 5

I'd have to give it a 9.5 ! I've written lyrics for years, and I think my writing gets better all the time. It humbles me when I read/hear lyrics like yours, because they're REALLY THAT GOOD! Congratulations, and best of luck. Get the music recorded, so I can buy it. Rock on!!

Answer 6

Hey me 2 i would love to hear it!! ..about the rating ..i dont know?? im not good at this but for me i really liked the lyrics so 9 out of 10

;) wish you all the best luck in your band

Answer 7

GREAT STUFF wouldn't mind hearing it with music i think it will kiss *** i give it a 9.9

Answer 8

9!!!

I really like them, I 'd be interested in your music.