ROMANTIC POEM #1
If only you didn't make me hit you...we'd still be together
If only I weren't in jail, I could force you to make me dinner.
Some nights I lie awake dreaming of your face
Other nights I page through a porno mag my cellmate smuggled in
If you weren't such a nagging, stupid woman
we could've been so happy together.
I could have yelled at you, berated you, told you not to hang out with your friends
because I'm a secure man who doesn't want you to do anything but spend time with me.
I never would have cheated on you
had you not made me.
Now, sitting in my jail cell, I ponder the other women I had
none of them were you, which...come to think of it
IS EXCELLENT.
You were such a lovely person on the inside
at least, that what's you always told me.
We could have had such a great life together
me getting drunk all day while you clean the house.
You only had me arrested because that's what the feminists
told you to do.
You blew it.
2006-12-17 10:36:00 · 11 answers · asked by Anonymous in Arts & Humanities ➔ Books & Authors
It is a funny poem.
Romance usually means two people are together and enjoying the intimacy. It's difficult to have romance if you are alone in jail. If the woman that the poem is written to has always experienced acceptance and approval, you'd seem like a unique person she couldn't get enough of, but not quite, because she had you arrested, ah well.
2006-12-17 10:48:01 · answer #1 · answered by Gary B 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Not one that was any good. My current BF of 2+ years has written 3 poetry books (many years ago) and not once written me a poem. But A BF from High School wrote me a song that was quite good, called Diamond Eyes. He performed it live at camp that summer.
2016-05-23 02:58:28 · answer #2 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
considering that every poem on this site is full of irritating rhyme, I stand up and Applaud you. Yay!
I think this poem is clever and witty.
maybe you could clean up your lines or rearrange them so that the lines in the poem become progressively angry, more demanding as they descend.
I would suggest, ending the poem with
I love you, and you blew it.
adds more punch.
2006-12-17 10:44:54 · answer #3 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
Yes. It is very romantic. Especially considering all the prison-love. Based on real life issues, I presume?
2006-12-17 10:43:13 · answer #4 · answered by cailleachaeryn 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Awesome. Mind boggling. True to life. I'm so glad I clicked on this question. I'm going to print it out and take it to our local women's shelter. They'll love it too! God bless and Keep Writing.
2006-12-17 11:01:23 · answer #5 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 1⤋
You use good grammar and spelling, and I think you're kidding.
2006-12-17 10:48:27 · answer #6 · answered by B K 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Awe someone's bitter!
It's a bit crap!
2006-12-17 10:44:27 · answer #7 · answered by Sorcha 6 · 0⤊ 1⤋
sounds to me like you are talking to yur *** is that where you get dinner
2006-12-17 10:39:03 · answer #8 · answered by doc 4 · 0⤊ 1⤋
no
Thomas
2006-12-17 10:44:52 · answer #9 · answered by salarian2001 2 · 0⤊ 1⤋
hell no. what the hell is wrong with you?
2006-12-17 10:57:45 · answer #10 · answered by dark_poet_08 1 · 1⤊ 1⤋