I could see the rain pouring down from the rooftop
I could see the thunderstorms raging through the skies
I could see the horizon setting across the land
Yet why couldn't I see your heart tear and bleed?
(Bridge)
Girl I know you're bearing the hardship of being alone inside
The torment of breakup that transcends above anything else
Girl I'm sorry for making you cry
That makes it hard for me to say goodbye
(Chorus)
You're my beautiful angel...
My one and only girl..
I have so much to tell you..
That my feelings for you is true
So girl we have so many things yet to do
But I just know inside my heart..
That our love just isn't meant to be true
When you were gone
My world turned blue
The skies went grey
The grass withered with tears shed
The sea wailed in cries out for your dear name
And the culprit was you
(Last bridge)
Sorry baby for all the quarrels
I know you feel the heartache too
So now it's time to set you free
For you to pursue your dreams
And I only want to say..
Goodbye baby
2006-12-17 03:22:44 · 14 answers · asked by Anonymous in Entertainment & Music ➔ Polls & Surveys
I wanna be the next James Blunt when I grow up!!!!
2006-12-17 03:23:14 · update #1
It is very good, is it played on guitar? stupid quesion, um.. the flow is good but there are someparts that aren't very fluid to the rest of the measure. i would love to hear you sing this and play it.
2006-12-17 03:28:40 · answer #1 · answered by live4literature 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
On a scale of 1-10, I'll give a 2. Painfull to read.
2006-12-17 03:31:14 · answer #2 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
The lyrics could desire to have a narrative that grabs the objective audience acceptable away. you prefer a reliable Hook to commence with. Your refrain lines are washy and lost. The verse is like none. So i think it quite is coming from an beginner, yet as you mentioned, i think of she'll like it and in all probability she would be able to.
2016-10-05 10:22:28 · answer #3 · answered by ? 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
A little gory (Yet why couldn't I see your heart tear and bleed) and the rhyming needs some work but the basic concept is very good. I give it a 7.5!
2006-12-17 03:26:27 · answer #4 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
I think it's lovely! Is this based on true life stories?
2006-12-17 03:28:22 · answer #5 · answered by Lightbulb without a cause! 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
You should send this to James blunt...he will sing it extra good.
2006-12-17 03:39:14 · answer #6 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
i couldnt really see your poem cause my bro took the chair from me and i cant see over the dask so sorry i bet it was good
2006-12-17 03:28:03 · answer #7 · answered by Aycilla 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
its really beautiful!
a really nice love song...and it would be a really nice slow jam, like R&B...great work!
Merry Xmas!
2006-12-17 03:26:34 · answer #8 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
I like it. Good Luck!
2006-12-17 03:27:57 · answer #9 · answered by kayboff 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I am poor reader of poems..I don't love them.
2006-12-17 03:26:04 · answer #10 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋