I need help with my English?

Question

Please check if their is any grammar mistakes?
here:
Life without music is like a frosty minter without the sun. Music can help us get rid of our stress; it can let our dull moment turn into joyous time. Music can also help us drain away our depressions. When our favorite song is playing, we can’t help but to sing and dance along with the music. Like this, we can forget about all our worries and troubles. Music really makes our lives more interesting.

Answer 1

There were a few mistakes but very well done:

Life without music is like a frosty winter without the sun. Music can help us get rid of our stress; it can let our dull moments turn into joyous time. Music can also help us drain away our depressions. When our favorite song is playing, we can’t help but to sing and dance along with the music. Like this, we can forget about all our worries and troubles. Music really makes our lives more interesting.

Good luck

Answer 2

1. "Life without music is like a frosty winter without the sun"
[in cold, frosty days sometimes there´s sunlight; in this case, your view on life takes on quite a negative meaning (life = frosty winter days)]
[I would rephrase this verse ("Life without music is like a warm day without the sun") in order to send a more positive message, that is, I would compare "life" with "a warm day", and "music" with "the sun"]
2. "Music can do away with stress and turn dull moments into joyous ones."
[I think "can help us" should be replaced by "can do away with"; instead of using a semicolon, join the two ideas by a comma; in turn, you will have a more concise sentence, which flows more easily (I think)]
3. "Music can also help us drain away depression". ["Depressions", in the plural, mean "depressions on the ground"]
4. "When our favorite song is playing, we can´t help but sing and dance along".
[after the expression "can´t help but", one must use a bare-infinitive, that is, an infinitive without "to"; at the end of the sentence, "with the music" may be omitted because it is clear from the context]
5. "As we listen to music, we can forget all our worries and troubles."
["Like this" is a colloquial expression; it doesn´t match your style in the rest of the text]
6. "Music does make our lives richer, lighter and much more meaningful".
["really" is also colloquial; to emphasize, use "does make", which has the same meaning; also, at the end of the sentence, for the sake of rhythm, use 3 adjectives, instead of just one; in addition, "interesting" is such a shallow word that it should be avoided in writing]

Answer 3

Gramatical? "Life without music like a frosty minter"-- Is minter a word?--moment(s)--time(s)--may--!!!!!! You use too many run on's, Condense and concise. Great thoughtage but wordsmith it. It takes time and and work. You got a great work,working; now polish it.Instead of "can help us rid of our stress" just use rids(example) Music rids us of stress, turning all dull moments to joy. Good Luck!!!! You can look up my name and find the number iffen you need help.Oremor.

Answer 4

I don't see any grammar issues, just a logic one:

"...but to sing and dance along with the music. Like this, we can forget about all our worries and troubles."

I would change "music. Like this,..." to music, so....

Answer 5

Um, not so sure about the grammar, but you might try using winter instead of minter.

Answer 6

forget doesn't go with about. You forget all your worries, you think about them. And can't help but to sing sounds awkward, better make it can't help singing.
You could say those things when you speak, but written language is stricter about syntax and grammar accuracy.

Answer 7

theres nothing really wrong about it that i can see anyway!
are you english ? or not

Answer 8

Nothing wrong really!