What do you think of my song???
This is my first song that i have wrote so im just a beginner. Any comments or tips would be apppriciated! Thanks for your awnsers and time :
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Your soft tender kisses
your baby soft skin.
Baby you wanted to score.
But you gotta think again.
Im not the type of girl
that will do anything.
I just want your love.
I want your all and evreything.
I just want your love { baby}
I just want you to care
I just want to be your world.
I just want you to be there.
You want to go all the way.
But Im not ready yet.
You can't allways have
what you wanna get.
You going half crazy
but if you love we youll wait.
I just wanna be sure
your not a mistake.
I just want your love { baby}
I just want you to care
I just want to be your world.
I just want you to be there.
Now if you wanna leave
baby i wouldnt mind
Cuz a girl like me is one of a kind. { x3}
i dont want you to be a mistake
Baby no nooooo i dont
I dont want you to be a mistake
Baby, lets take it slowly
before we make a mistake
2006-12-16 16:18:00 · 8 answers · asked by ? 4 in Entertainment & Music ➔ Polls & Surveys
It's awesome. Keep it up!! Waiting for the next one.
2006-12-16 16:20:31 · answer #1 · answered by Raven 6 · 2⤊ 0⤋
You claim to want his love, but then you say that you wouldn't mind if he left. Which is it? It's not bad as a whole, but you need to straighten out what you're trying to say.
2006-12-17 00:30:00 · answer #2 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
Yes I like it.
2006-12-17 00:26:52 · answer #3 · answered by ▒Яenée▒ 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
you did a great job for your first time writing a song
2006-12-17 00:23:26 · answer #4 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
It made me feel like a bull.
2006-12-17 00:20:40 · answer #5 · answered by Professor Sheed 6 · 0⤊ 1⤋
its kinda confusing - you want two things but otherwise its good
2006-12-17 00:32:02 · answer #6 · answered by ♫ singin_gurl1200 ♫ 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
beautiful
2006-12-17 00:19:54 · answer #7 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
it's cute
2006-12-17 00:19:34 · answer #8 · answered by Bren 7 · 1⤊ 0⤋