This is my first song that i have wrote so im just a beginner. Any comments or tips would be apppriciated! Thanks for your awnsers and time :
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Your soft tender kisses
your baby soft skin.
Baby you wanted to score.
But you gotta think again.
Im not the type of girl
that will do anything.
I just want your love.
I want your all and evreything.
I just want your love { baby}
I just want you to care
I just want to be your world.
I just want you to be there.
You want to go all the way.
But Im not ready yet.
You can't allways have
what you wanna get.
You going half crazy
but if you love we youll wait.
I just wanna be sure
your not a mistake.
I just want your love { baby}
I just want you to care
I just want to be your world.
I just want you to be there.
Now if you wanna leave
baby i wouldnt mind
Cuz a girl like me is one of a kind. { x3}
i dont want you to be a mistake
Baby no nooooo i dont
I dont want you to be a mistake
Baby, lets take it slowly
before we make a mistake
2006-12-16 16:08:45 · 5 answers · asked by ? 4 in Entertainment & Music ➔ Music
its not bad....consider taking a class that will give you points and tip on how to express your words better.....
2006-12-16 16:17:15 · answer #1 · answered by Mintjulip 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
My honest opinion, and I am a active musician. Boring. It might work in a contemporary Christian genre but not in a mainstream pop or rock genre. Don't mean to sound cruel, just honest.
2006-12-16 16:55:11 · answer #2 · answered by srbatey@sbcglobal.net 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I really like it. I like how it flows and I like what you are saying. there are a lot of young girls out there who can identify with the words. GREAT JOB!!! Keep on writing.
2006-12-16 16:17:18 · answer #3 · answered by peace 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
good job i really like it when you said
" Now if you wanna leave
baby i wouldnt mind
Cuz a girl like me is one of a kind. { x3} "
2006-12-16 16:20:05 · answer #4 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
are thy your crush
2006-12-16 16:11:59 · answer #5 · answered by hannah1 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋