how can you offer home
to a stranger unknown
with no map to find
the peaks of the mind
and valleys of the heart
where do you start
to glow and ascend
will purity transcend
when the concrete invades
and an abstraction fades
depression was a season
before she gave me reason
to keep connection
in this human collection
Now, I intellectualize
feelings that have no eyes
can a gift stay alive
can kindness still thrive
on the end of this vine
nothing to be mine
but only for once see
filtered eyes set free
2006-12-16 09:36:08 · 6 answers · asked by the w 1 in Arts & Humanities ➔ Books & Authors
actually, there's alot of themes in this piece.
break down what you really want to say, and just straight out write it.
don't limit yourself to rhyme. well written rhyme poems are few are hard to find. your a novice. stick to a prose form for now. work on the rhyme later.
I like this one line: valleys of the heart.
2006-12-16 09:44:56 · answer #1 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
It sounds like someone was really depressed but then a woman gave the person a reason to live but then she wnt away, and now the person wonders if he can remain cheerful with only the kindness of the person left behind.
2006-12-16 17:42:17 · answer #2 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
um.. if its your heres a tip, dont do the 2 line rhyme scheme, try every other or even internal
2006-12-16 17:38:51 · answer #3 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
my comprehension is not that good but i think it's saying that you can't start something with nothing. you have to begin from somewhere but it's a nice poem. who made it?
2006-12-16 17:41:48 · answer #4 · answered by jdukenumber1 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Punctuation is your friend.
2006-12-16 17:40:14 · answer #5 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
L.S.D.
2006-12-16 17:38:50 · answer #6 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋