I ventured downstairs late last night after hearing lots of noise.
I found a fat man in my chimney with a big bag full of toys.
"I'm stuck inside your chimney and I cannot get free, would you please help out old Santa and lend a hand to me?"
I said, "I am an officer, and I know all the laws, before I help just prove to me that you are Santa Claus".
"Just go up on the rooftop and look at Rudolphs nose,
then come back down and tell me if it's red and it still glows. Dashers got the measles and Prancer has a cough,
Vixen almost missed the roof and my sleigh almost fell off.
Blitzens got an attitude, Donners' just upset, and I am starting to believe they need to see a Vet.
So I went up on the rooftop all covered up with snow,
I saw a sleigh with reindeer, the first nose all aglow.
They all were just there waiting for St. Nick to come on top,
to get in the sleigh and take them to the next deserving stop.
2006-12-15 11:38:58 · 12 answers · asked by Joe 6 in Society & Culture ➔ Holidays ➔ Christmas
I went back in to Santa and said:
"I feel such great remorse,
that I have delayed you
from continuing on your course".
I pulled him from the chimney,
then he looked at me and said:
"Tomorrow when you waken,
all things will be alright
you believed me and then freed me,
and you helped save Christmas night".
Merry Christmas to all!!!!
2006-12-15 11:47:48 · update #1
Cute.
My youngest likes it but says it needs more
like what happens next.
2006-12-15 11:41:16 · answer #1 · answered by paravou 3 · 1⤊ 0⤋
you should publish it and see if someone could draw perfect pictures of each reindeer's actions. as well as a near miss picture. a vet may like it as a story to have out during the Christmas season. even have a vet story liker Santa thinking of the vet visit. or the vet showing up in the north pole. animal lovers in general may like it to read to their pets.
2006-12-15 11:50:48 · answer #2 · answered by angelchele 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Its really good. Just put in a resolution at the end where the narrator goes back down and frees Santa and Santa gives him an extra present or something. Kids will want closure, they like endings that tie things up.
2006-12-15 11:41:39 · answer #3 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 0⤋
Quite interesting
2006-12-15 11:42:00 · answer #4 · answered by lucky_you 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
sure, and that i have shared it. isn't it exciting how the media has misplaced activity in those adult males? keep in innovations back at the same time as they were all in the forefront of the documents and in our minds? How quickly we ignore...and yet they proceed to pass and serve, and die. ma
2016-10-18 08:39:37 · answer #5 · answered by wishon 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
This is very cute.
But I agree with the second or third poster;
add a bit more about how it ends, because
right now it's sort of a cliffhanger.
2006-12-15 11:43:05 · answer #6 · answered by ? 2 · 1⤊ 0⤋
Thats GREAT!!!! Excellently written - but did you help him out of the chimney?
2006-12-15 11:42:25 · answer #7 · answered by missie 4 · 1⤊ 0⤋
wow u did grate if i was u i would share it to my friends not just on the web but i am a teacher and i tech poetry so i say that was grate
2006-12-15 12:36:28 · answer #8 · answered by airplaneboy100 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Aw
2006-12-15 11:42:20 · answer #9 · answered by Coalie 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
That was neat. I really enjoyed it. ( I know...nobody uses the term "neat" anymore)
2006-12-15 11:42:23 · answer #10 · answered by colored_gem23 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋