Do you like this poem , I wrote (based off of runaway love by Ludacris) ?

Question

Little Minnie is thirteen years old
Shes steady tryin to figure why the world is so cold
She looks at the black leather hanging from the door,
she aint trying to get no more!
Her family thinks she is crazy,
but all she really is lazy.
She got a kid but she aint its mami ,
Always hating on her papi.
Wishing he would go die in a hole
All he got it time for them hoes!
She wonddering why he got time for every one
but ddont seem to have time for his only one
Forced to think that hell is a place called home
Nothin else to do but get her clothes and pack
She say shes about to run away and never come back.

Answer 1

I dont think its bad but it could use some work. I cant relate it to Ludacris's song but its ok ....

Answer 2

UMM.. I LIKE LUDACRIS SONG BETTER