One of my notions is that those public restroom drains,
So bronze and grated they appear to be industrious chains,
Should not, so seemingly, be the source of nostalgia's noxious exhast,
But mere mechanisms spaced forseeably apart unto a conformity's loss.
I should not be overwhelmed but that somehow
into their pipe dreams I would unfurl a brow,
Ambivalent of ever finding common ground,
or home where wooden picture frame memories make a belly round.
I don't understand why I should ever stop now,
Or sigh and suddenly be like, "Oh, wow...I was a dumb cow."
Instead I will find something lost in a momentary silence,
And continue with my attempts at a valence.
And get back to work, allowing the restroom door to wheeze shut.
2006-12-15 08:16:32 · 9 answers · asked by storm_eagle81 1 in Arts & Humanities ➔ Other - Arts & Humanities
I do not, nor would not, give letter grades to poems or prose fiction. I do not believe creative writing should be given a letter grade. When I grade freshman essays, I use a rubric. Do not mistake my meaning. I am not an aesthetic relativist. I believe in comparative competition.
For instance, some sonnets are better than other sonnets, and some sestinas better than other sestinas, etc. I will say that in your poem I saw something of a struggle between wanting to "say something" and wanting the persona to seem without care.
2006-12-15 08:33:42 · answer #1 · answered by Philip Kiriakis 5 · 1⤊ 0⤋
i think a B. This poem shows some true depths even though some parts of it were seeming like a force. it seems as if you are forced to see the rhyming and think deep thoughts. the poetic value. there is poetic value in anything.
2006-12-15 08:26:52 · answer #2 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
sorry to tell you think but number 1, bathroom pipes are really not that interesting and number 2 i would give it a D because the poem isnt great.
2006-12-15 08:25:34 · answer #3 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
It envokes a kind of innovations and that i like it. word selection replaced precise right into a splash legnthy and awkward in route of the placing out up yet you extra it back properly, in my view. even with the truth that, i'd want to've actually been reading it incorrect. ;) i like it both way :)
2016-10-18 08:30:08 · answer #4 · answered by ? 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
i would give it a D . good effort, no poetic value, no richness , i could not really get a point except... you hate the fact that everything is a matrix and honestly...it bored me crazy with endless BLAHHHHHH!
2006-12-15 08:23:33 · answer #5 · answered by ***BUTTERFLY*** 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
C - it might work as a public service message in a public toilet.
2006-12-15 08:23:04 · answer #6 · answered by braennvin2 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
D-... i didnt like it sorry and it didnt seem like a poem either..
2006-12-15 08:24:04 · answer #7 · answered by name_forgotten 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I hate poetry...
2006-12-15 08:18:19 · answer #8 · answered by incognitas8 4 · 1⤊ 0⤋
F.....This is noy poetry!
2006-12-15 08:21:07 · answer #9 · answered by Jungleleah 1 · 1⤊ 0⤋