Little Minnie is thirteen years old
Shes steady tryin to figure why the world is so cold
She looks at the black leather hanging from the door,
she aint trying to get no more!
Her family thinks she is crazy,
but all she really is lazy.
She got a kid but she aint its mami ,
Always hating on her papi.
Wishing he would go die in a hole
All he got it time for them hoes!
She wonddering why he got time for every one
but ddont seem to have time for his only one
Forced to think that hell is a place called home
Nothin else to do but get her clothes and pack
She say shes about to run away and never come back.
2006-12-15 00:50:01 · 12 answers · asked by --; cookie. 4 in Pregnancy & Parenting ➔ Adolescent
The question is what do you get from this when you read it and no I am not getting abused. I just wrote it using my nickname
2006-12-15 00:57:17 · update #1
If it were trash and If I were enduducated you wouldnt of understood it ....
2006-12-15 02:00:17 · update #2
I do write good stuff. Certainly I am writing about a teen mother who acheives being able to care for her kid.
2006-12-15 08:51:05 · update #3
Well if I can see from this is that there is a teenage mother. But the child is not hers. And the father has time to spend with every one else but not with her. She wishes that she could die and leave all he miseries. The last resort is to pack up and go.
well that's as much as i got
2006-12-15 01:05:11 · answer #1 · answered by Marco S 2 · 1⤊ 0⤋
Minnie, I can appreciate you are trying your talent at writing. Why not try to put your creative talents into writing with a positive message for young people.Don't give up your writing I just thought it would be interesting to hear a poem or song that gives hope to others.Life isn't always a toilet.Good luck to you.
2006-12-15 16:34:56 · answer #2 · answered by gussie 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
It does look like a poem... rythmes a lot too , which is hard to do for some people. So it's pretty cool. Oh and i think i got the message: the girl is sick of her usual life and wants a new one? lol... thats a try..
2006-12-15 10:50:00 · answer #3 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
Sounds like you trying to do a remix to the ludacris and Mary j blige song(RUNAWAY LOVE) but your basing the song on yourself.You missed a couple of verses.I probably didn't answer your question but i don't quite get it either.
2006-12-15 12:27:55 · answer #4 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
Sounds like an angry 13 year old who feels that she is not getting enough attention. In all honesty though, the poem is trashy and looks like it was written by someone uneducated.
2006-12-15 09:57:04 · answer #5 · answered by KathyS 7 · 0⤊ 1⤋
I get that you are with a guy who has no time ofr you and is always with other girls and that he has a kid wihch is not yours. and that you are tired of it and want to leave that hell hole is thatabout right?
2006-12-15 11:46:37 · answer #6 · answered by NavyBoi 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Are you being abused, talk to your teacher school counsellor of the police
2006-12-15 08:55:33 · answer #7 · answered by joss.stone10 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
very thought provoking. Sounds like your tired of your situation at home.
2006-12-15 09:00:24 · answer #8 · answered by Studmuffin 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
its good, but ur gonna need to strengthen it a bit more for guys to get it.... deepen the emotion it and itll get through to them in no time...
2006-12-15 11:19:17 · answer #9 · answered by flee1906 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
not really what is the question
2006-12-15 10:53:10 · answer #10 · answered by girlie 801 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋