Good, Catchy ending paragraph???

Question

I need help writing an ending paragraph for my essay. please do not tell me to do it myself, as i wrote the entire essay. this is an assignment for ninth grade english thanks

Media

Media has an impact on everything you do. The way you dress, the way you view people, and the way you talk are all influenced by the media. TV violence causes people to be violent. Advertising media builds our culture. Some argue that media does not have the larger impact, but rather that it is learned behavior.

Media violence has made its mark on the way people interact. Violence in shows is portrayed as glamorous and the characters often seem immortal or just get right back u p again. Media violence is not realistic. Brawls on television involve impossible stunts that should not be attempted by amateurs. Still some people do not realize they should not try.

Media culture defines what is “in” and decides how you must look and act to be “cool”” and fit in. Advertisers lure people, especially the younger generation into thinking that they absolutely must have this name-brand product or they will not be considered “cool.” Many do not realize they are being brainwashed, but, in their subconscious minds, they are judging people on how they look.

Although behavior learned from ones surroundings is a factor, the “environment” where one is always has some form of media in action. When people go for a drive, radio is their choice of media. When cleaning they choose either radio or TV. Waiting in line at the checkout counter, we go for the tabloid newspapers and magazines.

I rewrote the violence paragraph

Media violence has made its mark on the way people interact. Violence in shows is portrayed as glamorous and the characters often seem immortal or just get right back u p again. Everyday a cartoon character is beat up, injured, or killed, only to return in the very next episode, good as new. (e.g. South Park.)Media violence is not realistic. Brawls on television involve impossible stunts that should not be attempted by amateurs. Still some people do not realize they should not try those stunts. Take, for example the murder of a child in Norway, the result of kids imitating Power Rangers or the countless cases of animal cruelty copied from “Beavis and Butthead,’ or the hospitalizations of kids trying to be like “Jackass” characters and doing things that would definitely injure them, all because they had seen it on TV.

Answer 1

Quite simply, media is pervasive. It is everywhere, and we are constantly inundated with images that shape our opinions, whether it is what item to buy, what product is popular, whom to vote for, or how to behave. A greater understanding of the media and it's influence over individuals and society is key if we are to truly make informed decisions.

Answer 2

I agree with your premise that TV violence encourages more violent acting-out, but I think some emphasis could be placed on personal will. I also am a firm believer that advertising has had undue influence in our culture, but again, are we not willing participants? In the day-to-day world, we are "massaged" by these sounds and images and readily allow them whenever we turn on a TV and/or radio or even look at a billboard. Should we not take some responsibility for the very things we consume (whether it is food, clothing or entertainment) and find some rationale as to why we consume them? The momentum of your piece seems to suggest these things, so perhaps your closing could summarize what has been implied.

Answer 3

You need a better opening paragraph.

Try using examples or some Stats. in your essay

You need to be able to back up your points that you made.

The essay is a good start but needs some work.

At the end you souled talk about how people can not be influenced by the media

Answer 4

Well written. I have one suggestion in the main part, and then we can work on the ending. In your opening paragraph, you state that TV violence cause people to be violent. I suggest rewording that somehow. Maybe "studies have shown that TV violence...." The only reason I suggest that is that in the body of your paper you do not prove the opening statement. You do address TV violence, but you don't show that it causes violence. Does that make sense?

If you need to make the paper longer for some reason, you missed a huge media outlet: the Internet.

For the final paragraph, you simply need to restate the opening paragraph in different words. It is a quick summary of what the reader has just read.

Nice work.

Answer 5

Take a private place and proportion the sentiments and feeling that your experience by using her written words led you and extra you to this element. instead of a brushstroke posture - a private, emotional reaction as to how this has replaced your existence brings it intensity, then ask your objective audience a question - like; if Anne knocked at your door, what might you have achieved?

Answer 6

basically just write how the media effects in both good and bad ways. use points which arnt in the rest of the essay.

Answer 7

You have remarkably good English and syntax for your age, but I just don't agree with your conclusions. They're too simplistic, forceful, and not supported by any evidence. I believe you're smart enough to do better. Good luck!

Answer 8

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