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Immigration feast day was an enormous success, thanks to blank, blank, and blank. The food, the culture, and the amazing immigrant stories, could actually make you feel that you were in another country. Also the food was delicious. You really got the feel for what immigrants really went through to come to America in the late 1800s.
Anyway to make it sound better?
2006-12-13 11:37:14 · 6 answers · asked by katiekcat5 3 in Arts & Humanities ➔ History
The delicious food, the culture, and the amazing immigrant stories, could actually make you feel like you were in another country.
2006-12-13 11:39:56 · answer #1 · answered by Alyssa 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Immigration Feast Day was an enormous success, thanks to blank, blank, and blank. The delicious food, the amazing display of diverse cultures, and hearing the fascinating immigrant stories made one actually feel what it is like to be in another country. One really got a sense of what immigrants had to go through to come America in the late 1800s.
(Hope that sounds a little better)
2006-12-13 11:46:22 · answer #2 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
Immigration Feast Day was an enormous success, thanks to blank, blank, and blank. The food was delicious, the cultural experience, and the amazing immigrant stories made you feel that you were in another country. You could strongly feel what immigrants endured coming to America in the late 1800s.
2006-12-13 11:45:13 · answer #3 · answered by History Nut 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
"Immigration Feast Day was an enormous success thanks to blank, blank, and blank" (leave the comma out between success & thanks.
"The food, the culture and the amazing immigrant stories really made you feel like you were in another country" (stay away from using words like actually.
Cut out the "food was delicious" sentence...you already mentioned it in the sentence before.
I would avoid using "really" two times in one sentence. Maybe rephrase is like "You definitely got the feel for what the immigrants went through to come to America in the late 1800s."
Oh, and capitalize Immigration Feast Day.
So, this is what it would sound like all together...
Immigration Feast Day was an enormous success thanks to blank, blank, and blank! The food, culture, and the amazing immigrant stories really made you feel like you were in another country. You definitely got the feel for what the immigrants went through to come to America in the late 1800s.
Good luck!
2006-12-13 11:45:02 · answer #4 · answered by Froggy 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Immigration Feast Day was an enormous success, thanks to the sponsors who donated funds and the volunteers who donated their time to set up the displays.The food, the music, and the amazing immigrant stories actually made you feel that you were reliving their experiences.
2006-12-13 12:00:17 · answer #5 · answered by Max 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
The person above me is correct.
Also, I'm not sure if you know this, but isn't Immigrant Feast Day a proper noun? Then it should be capitalized. I don't know. Just trying to help you with capitalization because that helps make it better. :)
Otherwise, it sounds great!
2006-12-13 11:43:55 · answer #6 · answered by ICan'tThinkOfAGoodName 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋