“Oh my” I cried “I’m late for school! I asked mom to wake me up at 7:00 but I woke up at 9:00! I went downstairs to the kitchen and you know what I saw? I saw my dad’s favorite bowl full of cereal, flipped over. My mom’s coffee spilled on the kitchen floor. I cleaned up the kitchen floor all by myself I went back upstairs to check my parent’s room, but they weren’t there only my sleepy dog summer. I went in the garage to see their car was there. Guess what I saw their car .I was getting worried .I sat down on my couch and thought .I thought about the attic , because they always hang out there .They weren’t there .I got sick and tired of it so I went in my backyard , because they might be talking about how I’m doing in school. I didn’t see them .So I sat on the floor outside and cried .I went to go get my dog, summer. We went to their work to see if they were there I saw a box so I looked in it and it sucked me in to a prehistoric time s with cave man . They were being sacrificed in the volcano .Guess what? I opened my eyes and I was in my room with my pajamas on and it was only 6:30 am . When I went to school I told my friends all about it and they thought I was creepy.
2006-12-13 09:17:22 · 13 answers · asked by Anonymous in Entertainment & Music ➔ Polls & Surveys
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2006-12-13 09:25:21 · answer #1 · answered by D.F 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Im confused. is this a dream or a story? if its a story you need to elobrate on what happened when you were in the box. the part wehre you get sucked in the box is the climax, now you need to build it back down and explain the ending better. and the part about school needs to be more clear, did you wake up in the story and went to school and told your friends or did you actuallly wake up in real life and tell this to your friends?
2006-12-13 09:24:04 · answer #2 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
what I know about dream interpretation: cleaning the mess in kitchen is good it means you life is not a mess. Looking for your parents means you so love 'em, you worry to lose 'em one day (God forbid). The sacrifice thing means (but I'm not really sure) you have to make an offering or maybe your parents should make one!!! Are you religious btw?
2006-12-13 09:33:58 · answer #3 · answered by they're savages 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
pretty good imagination. a few spelling/punctuation errors, but other than that- looking good.
Revise the story and double check your spelling. You need to insert a few commas (,) or a colon (:)
2006-12-13 09:20:39 · answer #4 · answered by da_nikkster 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Depends on what you are trying to accomplish with the story. The story is fine, for a kid writing it, but why are you writing it?
2006-12-13 09:20:52 · answer #5 · answered by Aziz_Z 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
haha. ya good story...i think....
i think your creepy too if it counts for anything? needs petter punctionation in the story though. would make it more effective...
2006-12-13 09:20:07 · answer #6 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
That is really crazy..i was just a dream
2006-12-13 09:20:19 · answer #7 · answered by Pumpkin Nickel Bread 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Strange dream....
2006-12-13 09:19:23 · answer #8 · answered by cereal_killer034 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
sounds like a bad dream
good story though...BRAVO!!
=)
2006-12-13 09:20:14 · answer #9 · answered by §èxÿtà mmý ® 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
yeah, i have done things like that before. funny.
2006-12-13 09:22:59 · answer #10 · answered by angel 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Sorry, but doesn't do anything for me.
2006-12-13 09:19:30 · answer #11 · answered by ArchAngel Raziel 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋