I don't really know anything about poetry so I'd like to get some opinions from more experienced/ educated folks....
Your black is so beautiful, trimmed in that gold
Your life so short, your story should be told
Elegance of motion, as you take to flight
Dignified and regal is what you bring to light
Places your ancestor's once called home, meadows and fields
soon shall be gone
Your kingdom is now made of concrete and stone
Serenity I yearn to see you so close, to fly by your side is
what I wish the most.
[written in a prison cell]
2006-12-12 21:01:29 · 17 answers · asked by AK-47 2 in Arts & Humanities ➔ Books & Authors
I doubt anyone else is gonna look at this but the black and gold refers to a butterfly. And I want to leave it open to interpretation but concrete and stone might have to do with where it was written.
2006-12-13 11:33:04 · update #1
Trying to understand the poem My interpretation is.
A young Black man in prison sentenced to die. He has made his peace with his creator and is not afraid of his impending execution. He thinks of his ancestry and the Provence they lived in, in Africa.
The hopes of his continuing royalty that would have been, had his life followed in his his family tradition, are no longer a viable option. Modern expansion do to political upheaval has condemned him to death, and he waits with honor and peace with his maker for his impending death, and a Resurrection to a fuller life with his Lord.
It's a fine poem structure and the writer shows promise. Interpretation can vary, and that gives the reader a closer relationship to both the writer and the meaning.
2006-12-13 05:55:09 · answer #1 · answered by Charles H 4 · 2⤊ 0⤋
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2016-09-03 15:38:35 · answer #2 · answered by salguero 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Your kingdom is now made of concrete and stone..Not God
Remaining all are OK..
Considering the fact that it was written in prison,my congrats to the writer
2006-12-12 21:04:22 · answer #3 · answered by K_D 1 · 1⤊ 0⤋
It may be about tijuca atra-the endangered black and gold cotinga. natural habitat destroyed-replaced by modern 'concrete and stone'-either captured and place in a 'prison' or plain old destruction of wildlife and montane atlantic forest
or it could be a simple prisoner who feels as threatened as the black and gold feathered phenomenon
2006-12-12 21:43:56 · answer #4 · answered by dominique 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Sounds like someone is looking for peace of mind perhaps maybe a comfort zone in a lonley place. Is this your kingdom?I'm no expert but I do write alot of poetry and most of mine comes from a feeling inside.To answer ..Yes I like it and If this is about you I am sorry for you.
2006-12-12 21:25:27 · answer #5 · answered by sean c 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
i feel this poem is really beautiful, it touches once heart, the dept of emotions are really amazing. I think its not fair of you calling yourself ignorant about poetry. It looks like you know more than many people.
2006-12-13 02:59:23 · answer #6 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
This is one of the best poems that I have seen here on Yahoo. Use "Regal dignity" instead of "Dignified and regal". " . . when you take to flight", rather than "as you take ..." . Seriously, sir, this poem touched me with it's grandeur. I wish I could have seen the title.
2006-12-12 21:16:38 · answer #7 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 1⤋
10 points from Sweden.
2006-12-12 21:12:44 · answer #8 · answered by fuchtig 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Personally, I really like it. It's got a great atmosphere and I love the sentiment. Great!
2006-12-12 22:13:28 · answer #9 · answered by scylax 3 · 1⤊ 0⤋
Im no expert, but I have no idea what you are talking about in this poem. It seems very deep though.
2006-12-12 21:06:09 · answer #10 · answered by serena3116 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋