They call the place Hallowed Ground and no holier a place there'd be.
The God of Life and Love had touched the Earth there, and declared our souls were free.
Soon it came upon the hearts of men to possess this holy ground, and for the land of the God of Life and Love the horns of war were sound.
Each man thought he knew this God far better than his brother, Each held that his conviction must be triumphant, and all others put asunder.
The winds of time a tempest be. They blew the dust up from the land, as the blood of Christian crusaders, Muslims, and Jews soaked into the desert sand.
From then; two thousand years until now this place where religious pilgrims go has been the heart of ambitiuos Kings causing their subjects blood to flow.
They call the place Jerusalem (City of Peace); the home of Golgatha, the Dome of the Rock, and Temple Mount. In the name of thwe God of Life and Love they increase the body count.
Now this place called Hollowed Growned is causing even more to die,
2006-12-12
11:57:48
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I pray to the God of Life and Love but he never tells me why.(This is the last verse I didn't have room on the first part) My name is Edward M. Mertell
2006-12-12
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So good, in fact, that I saved a copy for myself before I even opened this answer page.
I like it. And I think I know what you're trying to say with it.
You don't have to believe in God to pray for all those men who die in wars (just or unjust). Especially this war that the U.S. is now involved in.
Keep writing. Use a spell check program to clean it up, and submit it to the Army liaison department for publication in one of their newspapers. I bet they'd like it, too.
http://www4.army.mil/ocpa/resources/armynewspapers.html
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2006-12-12 12:15:36
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answered by Anastasia 5
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I haven't read your poem, but I can tell you that if you have to ask if you should become a writer, no you shouldn't.
You have to have a passion that can't be put down or satisified if your not writing. You don't have to give up your 9 to 5 job and shouldn't, to be a writer. You will not make a enough to live off of, especially in poetry. there are not many paying market for poetry, and at $2 a poem, you would have to sell a whole bunch to by a good dinner.
Stick to what you do for a living or what you plan on doing for a living, go to school and learn more about writing. You'll know if you're a writer (forget the professional part, you either are or are now a writer).
Good luck no matter what you decide.. and don't give up on the writing if you do have a burning desire to put the words on paper.
2006-12-12 13:27:22
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answered by Wanda K 4
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Let me throw something out there: there are only two or three living poets who actually make a living from poetry. All of the other great modern poets teach at universities in order to pay the bills. Poetry is not a viable career option -- the market for contemporary poetry is just appallingly miniscule.
Your poetry isn't out-and-out terrible, but it's not terrific either. Your language isn't particularly compelling or innovative, your theme is trite, and and you don't demonstrate any kind of original thought or complexity. If writing poetry makes you happy, then by all means do so, but don't plan on making a career out of it.
2006-12-12 12:59:43
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answered by Drew 6
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If you're a writer, no one else's opinion matters because you are compelled to write about what's in your head. Nearly anyone can write something and have it sound decent, given enough time and energy. But a professional writer - that's another level of energy and dedication.
How do you know? If you wake up in the morning and all you can think about is writing, then you're a writer.
Practice your craft, hone your skills like you would a sword. Good luck!
2006-12-12 12:10:15
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answered by cassee_ame 2
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I am a poetry fan and write now and then. Your poem is good. Some people write without using meter or rhyme then try to call it poetry. Don't get me wrong, some poems are effective using that kind of prose. I prefer classic poetry. Your writing reminds me of classic poetry and I think it's good. Keep writing and maybe someday you'll have enough for publication.
2006-12-12 15:41:24
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answered by ? 3
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What you are asking is would someone pay money to read this. I doubt it - I certainly wouldn't. That doesn't mean you shouldn't try to sell it. Poetry is very subjective.
Hint. Use a spell checker
2006-12-12 13:24:20
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answered by Anonymous
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Not if you want to eat regularly. Very, very few people make any money at writing poetry and even fewer manage to make a living.
2006-12-12 12:51:27
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answered by Sophist 7
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ur good..... though it is a religious poem, some publishers or magazine companies might not except it for that reason
2006-12-12 12:06:34
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answered by Kiki 2
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*oink* when you mention Jerusilum, your rhythem is off, and it stays that way for the rest of the poem *oink* Work on it as little.
2006-12-12 12:23:07
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answered by Anonymous
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are you sure this is a poem? i would suggest shortening the verses.
2006-12-12 12:09:21
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answered by Anonymous
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