Poem...Is it good?

Question

It was only yesturday that I hoped to find light

But merely is wasn't very bright

When I applied it to my life

It came to me a sharp as a knife

Forgetting not how the light looks

It is shinier than the brooks

So when I go to pray

I try to remember every day

That the brook of light so bright

Is much much different than night

So let not the knights lights blind you

But let it as so know that you will not forget the light from the knight

Therefore stay in the light

And try to with all your might

To know and to do what he has for you



What Do You Think Of It?

Answer 1

That was soo inspiring.................u are gifted!!!

Answer 2

It's pretty much poem-shaped, which is a good start. It's also mostly nonsensical, which is. . . perhaps not as good.

Your structure is pretty weird. No meter, and it's all in rhyming couplets except for "so let not the knights lights blind you." You haven't written much (any?) poetry before, probably, or if you have then you haven't read much. The first rule of poetry is that for most people, it's a lot of work. Consider puttting more work into your poem, choosing your words, shaping your lines, making sure that your symbols are coherent.

To sum up: it's bad, but probably only because you don't know any better. There's still hope for you.

Answer 3

Most people say that poems should rhyme...but I think it is very hard to write a truely good rhyming poem. It takes a lot of work, and a lot of time to get the knack of it (why I mainly write free verse).

Do you like it? If you like it, then it was worth writing. It has promise...you use a lot of metaphors, but I think the rhyme makes it sing-songy (which is very hard to avoid in rhyming poems--like I said, rhyme is hard). But if you want to work with rhyme, the good thing is, its something that you can improve on with time. A while back I read a book that I think was called "First Words"--it had some famous writers and poets early works (not their published works, but things they had written as teenagers and even as children). A few of the pieces were good even back then...but most I think most people would say were pretty bad. The best way to get better is to just keep reading and writing. You'll never know what you could have written if you stop.