can anyone correct my short story please!?

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A Canadian tourist worked hard during two years to raise money for a trip to Europe. When time arrived he took 3 weeks of vacation and he flew to Paris where he spent ten days; then traveled to Germany where he spent the rest of his wonderful vacation.
Coming back, at Frankfurt airport and while waiting in the boarding room; he eat a sandwich, jus and put an apple away in his hand bag for later.
When he was on the airplane, and before landing the Stewart handed to him custom declaration witch contained many questions to witch he answered by no to all of them since he was a tourist, he had no weapons no merchandize, no drugs and so on.
After landing, in Montreal airport he was chosen for the baggage search. During random baggage check the agent found the forgotten apple in his bag.
“Sir what is this?”
“An apple I guess”
“You have declared in your card no fruit!”
“Sorry I have forgotten it”
“You forgot?” she said with a mocking voice, “$ 400.00 then”
“$ 400.00 for what?

“$ 400.00 as a fine for a wrong declaration”
“Madam, I told you before that I have forgotten it”
“Sorry these are the rules”
“Madam, I have a solution, I throw it in the garbage and next time I will be more attentive”
“Sorry, you have to pay”
Then the poor tourist ate the apple and told the agent
“Prove to me that I had an apple.”
Then the agent was embarrassed and understood that she made a big story for a problem that might end by a simple warning. Especially the man has admitted that he has forgotten it and he apologized for that mistake.
Finally, to not look like stupid, the agent smiled and let him go out.

Answer 1

I have put all my corrections in capitals so they will be easier to see- but read the whole thing, I changed some punctuation. I added an explanation after MAN- take that out. Also, you might want to give the poor tourist a name. Jon or Phil or Jack.


A Canadian MAN (((((he is not a tourist when he's in canada, working))))) worked hard during two years to raise money for a trip to Europe. When THEtime arrived he took THREE weeks of vacation and flew to Paris where he spent ten days. Then HE traveled to Germany where he spent the rest of his vacation. HE HAD A WONDERFUL TIME.
FINALLY, IT WAS TIME FOR THE MAN TO COME HOME. WHILE WAITING IN THE LOUNGE AT FRANKFURT AIRPORT, THE MAN ATE HIS SANDWHICH AND PUT AN APPLE AWAY IN HIS BAG, WHERE HE FORGOT ABOUT IT.
WHILE on the airplane, the Stewart handed him A custom declaration WHICH contained many questions ABOUT WHAT HE WAS BRINGING BACK WITH HIM. He answered by no to all of them. Since he was a tourist, he had no weapons OR merchandize, no drugs OR ANYTHING ELSE OF INTEREST.
After landing in Montreal airport he was chosen for A baggage search. During THE baggage check the agent found the forgotten apple in his bag.
“Sir what is this?”
“An apple I guess”
“You have declared in your card THAT YOU HAVE NO fruit!”
“I'M sorry I MUST have forgotten it”
“You forgot?” she said with a mocking voice, “$ 400.00 then”
“$ 400.00 for what?

“$ 400.00 as a fine for a wrong declaration”
“Madam, I told you before that I HAD forgotten it”
“Sorry, these are the rules”
“Madam, I have a solution. I WILL throw THE APPLE in the garbage and next time I will be more attentive”
“Sorry, you have to pay FOR THE APPLE”
Then the tourist SMILED. HE ate the apple QUICKLY and SAID
“WHAT APPLE?”
Then the agent was embarrassed and understood that she made a big story for a problem that might end by a simple warning. Especially the man has admitted that he has forgotten it and he apologized for that mistake.
Finally, THE AGENT REALIZED SHE HAD BEEN BEATEN AND LET THE MAN GO.

Answer 2

A Canadian tourist worked hard for two years to raise money for a trip to Europe. When the time arrived, he took 3 weeks of vacation and he flew to Paris where he spent ten days; then traveled to Germany where he spent the rest of his wonderful vacation.
Coming back, at Frankfurt airport and while waiting in the boarding room; he ate a sandwich and put an apple away in his hand bag for later.
Before landing, the Steward handed him a custom's declaration which contained many questions. He answered 'no' to all of them. Since he was a tourist, he had no weapons, no merchandize, no drugs, and so on.
After landing, at Montreal Airport he was chosen for the baggage search. During the random baggage check, the agent found the forgotten apple in his bag.
“Sir what is this?”
“An apple I guess”
“You have declared in your card no fruit!”
“Sorry I have forgotten it.”
“You forgot?” she said with a mocking voice, “$ 400.00 then!”
“$ 400.00. For what?
“$ 400.00 as a fine for a wrong declaration.”
“Madam, I told you before that I have forgotten it," the man pleaded.
“Sorry these are the rules,” she responded.
“Madam, I have a solution: I'll throw it in the garbage, and next time I will be more attentive!”
“Sorry, you have to pay”
Then the poor tourist ate the apple and told the agent, “Prove to me that I had an apple.”
The agent was embarrassed and understood that she made a big story for a problem that might end by a simple warning. Especially since the man admitted that he forgot and then apologized for that mistake.
Finally, to not look stupid, the agent smiled and let him go out.

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Answer 3

A Canadian tourist worked hard during two years to raise money for a trip to Europe. When the time arrived, he took three weeks of vacation and flew to Paris for ten days. He then traveled to Germany where he spent the rest of his wonderful vacation.
On his way home at Frankfurt airport boarding room, he ate a sandwich and put an apple away in his handbag for later on.
While on the plane, a stewardess handed him a custom declaration which contained many questions. He did not have any weapons, merchandise, drugs, etc. And so he replied with a no to all of the questions.
After landing in Montreal airport, his baggage was forced to be searched. An agent found the forgotten apple in his bag.
“Sir, what is this?”
“An apple, I guess.”
“You had had declared in your card that you had no fruit!”
“I'm sorry, I must have forgotten I placed it there.”
“You forgot?” the agent said with a mocking voice, “ you must pay four-hundred dollars then.”
“Four-hundred dollars for what?
“Four-hundred dollars as a fine for a wrong declaration.”
“Madam, I told you! I had forgotten it.”
“Sorry, these are the rules.”
“Madam, I have a solution. How about I throw it in the garbage can? Next time, I shall be more attentive."
“I'm sorry, you have to pay.”
The poor tourist ate the apple and replied to the agent.
“Prove to me that I had an apple.”
The agent turned a bright crimson red, and understood that she made a vast deal over a problem that could have been solved with a simple warning. Of course, the man had admitted and apologized multiple times that he had forgotten about the apple.
Finally, the agent smiled and let him leave.


I tried my best :)

Answer 4

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