(Just to let you know, I didn't rhyme words on purpose.)
Velvet clouds pass overhead like a child's mobile.
Snowflakes begin their silent downward spiral onto my face.
I’m paralyzed from this loss.
I can’t help but question my fate.
Engraving your name into the snow,
Recollecting my shattered thoughts of you.
I know the new snowflakes will fill and erase the etched words,
But the memory will sustain.
I walk alone through the twinkling forest,
Frosted tree limbs chime bearing crystal ice.
The sun is stagnating beyond the skyline,
And the yellow dusk illuminates the frozen blanket of ice.
My exhalation brings a puff of ghostly white vapor.
No resonance but the crunch of snow beneath my feet.
Wishing for a sign,
The nostalgia overcomes my body.
As I collapse and descend gracefully to the Earth,
To gaze up at the cloud patterns.
There is nothing and no one to look up to,
But the snowflakes falling silently onto my face.
.......
Please be honest.
=]
2006-12-10 12:41:34 · 11 answers · asked by Katelyn 4 in Entertainment & Music ➔ Polls & Surveys
Very nice ... Honestly
sounds peaceful yet puzzling in YOUR mind but I like it
I can relate for sure
2006-12-10 12:44:39 · answer #1 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 0⤋
At some 5150 and some Van halen and you are all done.
2006-12-10 20:50:07 · answer #2 · answered by rljmmp 3 · 1⤊ 0⤋
It was a piece of crap literature find something better to do with your time like changing gramps diaper GOODLUCK
2006-12-12 08:38:34 · answer #3 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
Honestly, I love your imagery and you can virtually feel the coldness and see the snowflakes as you read it...very very good.
2006-12-10 20:45:28 · answer #4 · answered by tigerlily_catmom 7 · 2⤊ 0⤋
Yeah its pretty good! i dont get the first line though, do you mean mobile phone? lol forgive my ignorance its late yaaawn ;)
2006-12-10 20:48:17 · answer #5 · answered by Mako-Eyes 2 · 1⤊ 0⤋
It's pretty good.
2006-12-10 21:49:55 · answer #6 · answered by Judas Rabbi 7 · 1⤊ 0⤋
It was very good.
2006-12-10 20:45:23 · answer #7 · answered by Angel Kitty 2 · 1⤊ 0⤋
I like it!! Very nice!
2006-12-10 20:45:40 · answer #8 · answered by bassmaim 3 · 1⤊ 0⤋
Its good.
2006-12-10 21:06:07 · answer #9 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 0⤋
i love it.......it's very deep.....my own poetry doesen't compare.
2006-12-10 20:47:45 · answer #10 · answered by gerble2000 2 · 1⤊ 0⤋