What do you think of my lyrics?
Song Title: It's you again
Last week, I saw you with her
You looked so happy,
I felt so more than sure
that it was over
with me and you
(Hook)
it happened so fast, what could I've done,
the chance I had was none, then you showed up at my door,
I don't want you anymore.
(Chorus)
Doorbell rings, when I answer it, you are there
Your at the door again.
Wind chimes blowing, outside it's snowing,
Candy and flowers in your hand.
It's you again.
I was at the store on Friday afternoon,
I saw you there, thought it was to soon,
Talking 'bout the mistakes we made,
we got together too late
(Chorus)
(Bridge)
It’s not about how long it takes
It’s not about why we broke up
We just need to remember
The good times we had and we’ll
Be together.
If the shoe fits
We’ll never miss.
Doorbell rings when I answer it, you are there
Your at the door again.
Wind chimes blowing, outside it's snowing,
Candy and flowers in your hand.
It's you a…
Doorbell rings when I answer it, you are there
Your at the door again.
Wind chimes blowing, outside it's snowing,
Candy and flowers in your hand.
It's you again
Again
Again
Again
It’s you again. Oh ooh oh…
Maybe Lovin' you still....
2006-12-09 07:02:32 · 9 answers · asked by Anonymous in Entertainment & Music ➔ Music
Please be honest. I like some criticsm.
2006-12-09 07:02:58 · update #1
Just some venting of the mind if you just did it out of randomness. Besides, modern rock bands already have this type of song style saturated.
As a songwriter myself I can tell you this song will be good for you in the short term but don't expect it to get on MTV anytime soon. Everyone writes songs like this at some point but they never really make it into their cherished libraries of really good songs they made.
But while you're on the topic of breaking up in songwriting, I'd say continue on with it but just go through a full relationship in the song. It could (and probably will) make for a better song. You can include things about a breakup in the song but don't dwell on it. And don't focus on the datee too much either.
2006-12-09 07:11:19 · answer #1 · answered by I want my *old* MTV 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
SAD or ROCK? Okay.. I'm now not definite on that. If via unhappy you imply.... gradual and form of emo... Evanescence has tons of those, as good as rock, corresponding to: Hello Like You My Immortal Your Star Missing All That I'm Living For Sweet Sacrifice Weight of the World Going Under The Veronicas: All I Have Heavily Broken In Another Life Someone Wake Me Up My Chemical Romance has tons of well rock songs, and so does Switchfoot.
2016-09-03 09:31:27 · answer #2 · answered by willsey 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
its gd but here is a tip u may not wanna post ur stuf online cause anyone can steal it an take it as their own and then ur screwed ya know what i mean i write poems but i refuse to put my stuff online bc i work hard to write them
2006-12-09 07:33:35 · answer #3 · answered by Moose1123 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
That is a very good song. Wish I could write as good as that.
2006-12-09 07:11:54 · answer #4 · answered by Jazzy 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I give it 3/5 :)
not bad
2006-12-09 07:05:04 · answer #5 · answered by Paula 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Wow! That was cool!!!!!!!!
I love to write songs too!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
TTYL
ME!!!!!!!!
2006-12-09 07:08:27 · answer #6 · answered by Tinea W 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
i loved it!!! your a great songwriter
2006-12-09 07:07:19 · answer #7 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
it is pretty good but no
2006-12-09 07:07:16 · answer #8 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
cool...........
2006-12-09 07:10:56 · answer #9 · answered by bugzaper 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋