I WROTE THIS POEM BUT TO ME IT DIDN'T REALLY HAVE A PARTICULAR MEANING. I JUST WROTE IT RANDOMLY HAHA
If the light of the moon was the smile that you showed me
if the smile that you revealed was as bright as the moon
then i wouldn't have to worry
then i wouldn't have to see
what's bringing us down into pieces
what's shattering the mirror
that reflects abundant sunshine.
if that light was what keeps me going, now
i would be starving
Your smile never shows
It's like asking for a blue mopon
It's like asking for another summer
Something impossible
if the light of the moon grew old, like us
if the light of the moon knew sadness and anger,
then there wouldn't be reason to smile
Then there wouldn't be a world to see
and just like i need the moon to see where i am going, just like that,
i need your smile to see if this will survive
if the clouds and the sun...and the circumstances will let us grow old,
and survive.
2006-12-09 04:52:58 · 10 answers · asked by Anonymous in Arts & Humanities ➔ Books & Authors
its fluff. i don't care for it. sorry.
2006-12-09 05:14:52 · answer #1 · answered by airie53 3 · 1⤊ 0⤋
I like it. The metaphors comparing the person's smile with the fleeting insubstantialness of moon light and all light was nice. It makes me think of a person who is as delicate as moonlight and easily smothered and hidden.
Also that determination to counter this is not in that person's grasp alone, you can help them counter this and will be with them till the end comes.
2006-12-09 05:02:52 · answer #2 · answered by latterlycool 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I've been a published poet for 11 years and I am very very critical upon others writings, but girl you've got something good there. Kudos! Go to poetry.com and enter it. Seriously, I love it!!! It's got soul, pain, optimism- you are definitely a true poet!
2006-12-09 04:57:57 · answer #3 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
i write poetry and stuff like that too, it sounds like a story of life things that can happen and how everything can change in an instant
2006-12-09 04:56:24 · answer #4 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
It's nice. Did you write it? My only comment is that there's a new summer every year.
2006-12-09 04:56:10 · answer #5 · answered by La_Belle_LadyR99 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
that's really beautiful it sounds like it talks about someone that's important to you, maybe a friend or someone that you love. Its gorgeous
2006-12-09 04:55:55 · answer #6 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
I think that's a lovely poem, but what's a 'mopon'?
2006-12-09 04:55:19 · answer #7 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
it could be a song..its nice..but i don't know the real meaning of it
2006-12-09 04:58:07 · answer #8 · answered by someone 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
blah blah Don't quit your day job!
2016-05-22 23:03:32 · answer #9 · answered by ? 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Luv it, did u write it?
2006-12-09 04:54:56 · answer #10 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋