May I share?

Question

A poem;
At first sight,
gathering up the breath of all life knowing to be.

Attendant, dependant, small and revolving around another.

Irregularly brilliant and never seen as the phenomenon
of extraordinary splendor as the assemblage... A.M.H.

Answer 1

Good job!

Answer 2

You know, I am not a fan of rhyming poems unless they are put to music as a song. The modern poetry that I do like are poems that "work" without rhyming, that are metaphorical if not obscure, that require a little emotional and intuitve spelunking to "get". Girl, I think your poem qualifies!

Answer 3

That is very kind of you to share your thoughts in such a wonderful way, Your poetry has an innocence feel.
Its really an achievement to write such meaningful things in few line and yet your lines are simple.
May i ask you a question
Are you a professional?

Answer 4

to my friend that got busted 40 years ago, I mailed to him in the slammer, he was (80lb.)dieing of crippling Disease polio and should have been on legalized weed and went to California to live out another four years,

to clutch: If your ever introduced to a friend of a friend and he wants too~~
leave it in the dark cause that friend of a friend may be a narc and he'll get u~~

Answer 5

No you may not.

But I read the poem anyways. Good job. I liked it. I think I'll add it to my collection if you don't mind.

Answer 6

Is AMH your initials? It sounds very nice keep up the work.

Answer 7

You couldn't wait..... right? That is how we love our creations and perhaps in the belief that we created our children, we abound with parental love!!

By the way, would you in turn like me to share one of mine?

Answer 8

You may- it makes me think of a baby in a mother's womb-ahhh!

Answer 9

thank you for sharing

Answer 10

beautiful... thanks for sharing