Seems when I honestly converse, I frustrate
The motivation behind my birth must’ve been lust straight
From the onset, pain was never a foreign concept
Born screaming: Doc ain’t even hit me with his palm yet
Ironically, my cardinal trait is perpetual calmness
And neurotic girls like me because they figure I’m harmless
But what they don’t see beneath their perception of their man to be
Is a man whose introspection questions his sanity
We are all exposed to humanity and as I’m examining
Mankind's future, most roads lead to calamity
But we’re too blinded by emotions to understand and see
Ruled by our fear, which is demanding we
Use denial to cope, be soothed by the tear
And put a tie on the throat of those bringing truth to our ears
I planned on reading this at an open mic night and just wanted a little feedback in advance. Thanks.
2006-12-08 18:20:56 · 16 answers · asked by Subconsciousless 7 in Arts & Humanities ➔ Philosophy
The first thing that comes to mind is Pisces. (smile)
But I think you might be looking for... "Born Screaming".
2006-12-08 18:23:16 · answer #1 · answered by LifeisGood 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
The Truth of Life
2006-12-08 18:37:16 · answer #2 · answered by Ahmad Nasser 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Opaque Truth
2006-12-08 18:21:45 · answer #3 · answered by Best Guy 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
WOW! That's incredible. As for a name, I usually try to take what ever I was feeling when I wrote something to get a title.
That is really a wide range of subject matter so it's hard for me to even begin to imagine what you were feeling there.
2006-12-08 18:46:17 · answer #4 · answered by kcpaull 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
FINALLY!!! Of the countless poems I've read submitted onto this site, your poem is alas a REAL POEM of depth and ingenious interwoven complexity. You should be extremely proud to share such a profound externalization of your inner self. DUDE! IT ROCKS!!!
Perhaps you might entitle your poem :
"The Paradoxical Truth"
or...
"Paradox of Life"
2006-12-08 18:54:07 · answer #5 · answered by . 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
This title might fit your peom best: Perpetual Calamity.
I like your poem and I understand it too. I write poems also. Keep it up.
2006-12-10 16:51:00 · answer #6 · answered by Level424me 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I really like it, I think that you should definitley read it. I would name it "Life". It sounds like that is what you are describing from birth, to childhood, to manhood, to death. Or as stated in your poem, insanity drives you insane, so life is over and you turn cold.
2006-12-08 18:28:20 · answer #7 · answered by honeysuckle 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
F. U. Cosmo Kramer
2006-12-08 18:24:06 · answer #8 · answered by gentltailya 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I would name it "The Converse Truth".
2006-12-08 18:25:31 · answer #9 · answered by Mona 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
"The view from up here"
Might seem a little arrogant but thats a good thing.
2006-12-08 18:59:21 · answer #10 · answered by Spiderpig 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋