my heart aches when i see you.
i eat my pickle but it does not help.
i spread my mayonnaise of love on your picture.
oh Jared of subway.
you make me feel like a pastrami on white bread.
2006-12-08 16:37:09 · 20 answers · asked by dedmunkeeboi 1 in Arts & Humanities ➔ Books & Authors
It has some nice wordplay. It's not outright raunchy, either (as you can see-- some people only read what's on the surface). If you can be raunchy without people knowing, there's an art to that.
It kind of brings to mind, in different ways, the works of Arthur Rimbaud (subject), Allen Ginsberg (style) and Ogden Nash (humor).
2006-12-08 19:19:03 · answer #1 · answered by Roald Ellsworth 5 · 1⤊ 1⤋
"Hi! I'm Jared. I used to be fat. Now I'm just ugly"
Eh... he's still a bit chunky. *shrug*
Oh, the poem. Couldn't you think of anything to rhyme with mayonnaise? I don't believe I've ever heard/read it in a poem... I'd like to see it used to its fullest
2006-12-08 16:40:12 · answer #2 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 1⤋
Very interesting. Kind of makes me want a sandwhich. Minus the mayo.
2006-12-08 16:38:37 · answer #3 · answered by michelle_075 4 · 1⤊ 2⤋
That's intense. Jared must be some dude-alicious!
2006-12-09 01:58:46 · answer #4 · answered by Zeera 7 · 0⤊ 1⤋
I like it. Some people don't realize, but poems do not have to rhyme.
It's really beautiful except that it's a little un-co. Maybe it would help using correct grammar?
In English every line of a poem starts with a CAPITAL.
2006-12-08 16:48:10 · answer #5 · answered by 1 Cross + 3 Nails = 4 given 2 · 1⤊ 4⤋
Write something a little deeper that can tell you about the food. Otheriwse, it's great. Good luck! (I'm nogood cuz i'm 11)
2006-12-08 16:45:24 · answer #6 · answered by music4life788 3 · 1⤊ 2⤋
You have a very healthy appetite and some feeling.
2006-12-08 19:39:05 · answer #7 · answered by paloma 3 · 0⤊ 1⤋
Good Joke.
2006-12-08 16:47:09 · answer #8 · answered by mimi 4 · 0⤊ 2⤋
:D That's really funny!
I'm kind of confused by the guy who told you that your poem turns him into the country of Hungary, though... :)
Barjesse37
2006-12-08 16:42:22 · answer #9 · answered by barjesse37 3 · 2⤊ 2⤋
your mayonnaise of love, i realize your refering to sandwithes, but this could be taken as somethin else
2006-12-08 16:40:54 · answer #10 · answered by steven d 1 · 1⤊ 3⤋