Do you think that this Star Wars plot would be a worthy addition to the Star Wars movies?

Question

Hypothetical Question, here's episode VII's opening crawl--

IT IS A TIME OF PANIC IN THE GALAXY. EMERGING
FROM THE DEVASTATING WAR WITH THE YUUZHAN VONG,
LIFE 50 YEARS AFTER THE BATTLE OF ENDOR IS CORRUPTED. DARKNESS
ENVELOPS THE GOVERNMENT BODY OF THE POST-IMPERIAL GALAXY, AND
THE PROBLEMS OF THE OLD REPUBLIC BECOME RELEVANT ONCE AGAIN
IN GALACTIC AFFAIRS.

AS THE JEDI ORDER, LED BY LUKE SKYWALKER, ATTEMPTS TO
RESTORE PEACE TO THE UNRULY GALACTIC ALLIANCE, A NEW THREAT
EMERGES FROM THE OUTER RIM TO FURTHER UPSET THE TURMOIL.
THE REPTILIAN WARLORD XETHYR PLANS TO ATTACK, AND MAY HAVE A DARKER
AGENDA. JAINA SOLO, HEROINE OF THE JEDI, INVESTIGATES WITH THE INTENT
TO STOP HIS DEEDS. AS ALL OF THE HEROES OF THE REBELLION NOW HAVE
FAMILIES, THIS IS HARD TO DO.

A SKIRMISH HAS ALSO ARISEN BETWEEN CORELLIA AND THE PLANET OF
HAPES, AND CAUGHT IN THE MIDDLE OF THIS BATTLE ARE HAN SOLO AND
PRINCESS LEIA ORGANA, NOW WEDDED, WHO FEAR FOR THE SAFETY OF
THE GALAXY AND THE SAFETY OF THEIR SON, JACEN SOLO, WHO THE DARK
LADY LUMIYA PLANS TO CORRUPT AS THE NEW LORD OF THE SITH, ALTHOUGH
XETHYR MAY HAVE PLANS FOR HIM.....

WAR HAS ERUPTED. THE EVIL ALIEN XETHYR HAS SUCCEEDED IN HIS GOAL TO RESURRECT
THE DARK LORD OF THE SITH, AND THE JEDI COUNCIL'S FEARS HAVE BEEN REALIZED. AMIDST
THE FEAR AND CORRUPTION, A YOUNG JACEN SOLO IS BEGINNING TO TURN TO THE DARK SIDE
OF THE FORCE.

LUKE SKYWALKER IS SUSPICIOUS OF THE IDENTITY OF THE NEW DARK LORD, BUT IS OBLIVIOUS TO
JACEN'S TROUBLES. ONE WHO DOES SENSE SOMETHING WRONG IS HIS SISTER, JAINA SOLO. SHE SETS OFF
TO FIND HER BROTHER AND HELP HIM RESIST THE TEMPTATIONS OF DARKNESS. BUT LUMIYA'S POWER IS
NOT TO BE UNDERESTIMATED, AND JACEN HAS BEEN ORDERED TO COMMIT THE UNTHINKABLE.

THE NEW DARK LORD, WHOSE IDENTITY IS YET TO BE REVEALED TO THE GALAXY, HAS SET INTO MOTION
HIS MAGOCRATICAL PLAN FOR GALACTIC DOMINATION, WITH A SITH TRAINEE AS HIS NEW APPRENTICE.
JACEN SOLO, UNDER THE INFLUENCE OF LUMIYA, MAKES AN IDEAL CHOICE FOR THIS DESPICABLE ROLE....

HOPE FOR THE GALAXY IS BLEAK, AND JACEN SOLO HAS BEEN FULLY CORRUPTED. SHOCKED BY THE HORRID
DEEDS OF HER FORMER BROTHER, JAINA SOLO SECEDES FROM THE JEDI ORDER AND GOES INTO EXILE, BUT NOT
BEFORE INFORMING LUKE SKYWALKER OF JACEN'S TURN.

BEN SKYWALKER, SON OF LUKE AND MARA JADE, IS SENT TO THE COLONY WORLD OF PSEUDAQUATU TO SETTLE A DISPUTE
AMONG THE NATIVES, ALTHOUGH HE MAY FIND MUCH MORE. LEIA AND HAN, ROGUES SEPARATE FROM THE GALACTIC CORRUPTION,
PLAN TO MEET WITH LUKE TO REACH A SETTLEMENT BETWEEN THE TWO SEPARATED FAMILIES. LUKE, HOWEVER, MUST
DEAL WITH JACEN.

XETHYR AND THE DARK LORD HAVE CONTINUED THEIR SIEGE ON THE GALAXY, BUT WITH THE NEWLY FORMED DARTH KRAYT
AT THEIR SIDE. PLANS SET AGAINST THE JEDI ORDER AND THE SITH CODE OF BALANCE HAVE BEEN SET FORTH, AND WITH THEIR NEW
EX-JEDI ALLY, THE RAPTOR UNION FORCES ARE NEAR UNSTOPPABLE....

THE TROUBLES OF THE ALLIANCE REACH THEIR PEAK, AND THE RAPTOR UNION LEADS A FINAL BATTLE AGAINST
THE SKIRMISH WORLD OF CORELLIA. THE HEROES OF THE REBELLION BEGIN TO WEAKEN, DUE TO A POWER
UNDETECTED BY THEM: THE DARK LORD.

JAINA SOLO, NOW IN EXILE, HAS ,UNBEKNOWNST TO HER, STUMBLED INTO THE EXILE OF ANOTHER JEDI, WHO
IS LESS HUMAN THAN SHE. LUKE SKYWALKER MEETS WITH LEIA AND HAN TO DISCUSS THEIR PEACE, BUT IS FEARFUL
OF AN EVIL POWER RISING IN HIS NEPHEW.

BEN SKYWALKER, HAVING SOLVED THE DISPUTE ON PSEUDAQUATU, IS TORN BETWEEN DUTY AND HIS NEWFOUND LOVE FOR
TYANNA. AMONGST THE CASTLES OF CORELLIA, THOUGH, THE HEROES OF THE REBELLION WILL MEET THEIR MOST DIFFICULT
FOE YET IN AN ULTIMATE SHOWDOWN OF GOOD AND EVIL....

BATTLES HAVE SUBDUED AS THE RAPTOR UNION RETREATS INTO THE UNKNOWN REGIONS
AS IF ON CUE BY A MYSTERIOUS FORCE. THE GALACTIC ALLIANCE, NO LONGER TROUBLED BY
WAR, BEGINS TO QUARREL AMONGST ITSELF.

IN A STUNNING MOVE, THE FORMERLY NEUTRAL IMPERIAL REMNANT HAS CAPTURED
THE GALACTIC CAPITAL AND ESTABLISHED A NEW EMPIRE, WITH THE CUNNING ROAN FEL.
FAR FROM THE EVIL TYRANNY OF PALPATINE, IT IS A SLIGHT IMPROVEMENT OVER CORRUPTION.

HOWEVER, DARTH KRAYT, LAST OF ANAKIN SKYWALKER'S DESCENDANTS ASIDE FROM KOL AND HIS SON, CADE,
HAS SWEPT INTO THE CAPITAL AND LEADS AN ASSAULT ON THE EMPEROR HIMSELF, PLANNING ONTAKING THE THRONE FOR
HIMSELF. HOWEVER, KRAYT IS SECRETLY UNDER THE INFLUENCE OF SOMETHING DARKER.....

CADE AND HIS FRIENDS HAVE ABANDONED THEIR BOUNTY HUNTER LEGACY
TO FORM A SMALL GUERILLA WHO OPPOSES THE SITH EMPIRE. AS FAR AS THEY KNOW, THEY
ARE THE ONLY ONES TO OPPOSE KRAYT AND HIS DARK MASTER.

CADE, TROUBLED BY VISIONS, IS CONTACTED BY THE SPIRITS OF HIS ANCESTORS, AND IS MOTIVATED
TO RENEW THE JEDI AND THE REPUBLIC. HOWEVER, TO STAND UP TO THE PERSONIFICATION OF EVIL
IS NO EASY TASK.

MEANWHILE, HIS FRIENDS HAVE TROUBLES OF THEIR OWN WHEN IT IS DISCOVERED THAT DARTH NIHL, DARTH MALADI,
DARTH WYYRLOK, AND DARTH TALON ARE AFTER THEM, UNDER ORDERS FROM THE DARK EMPEROR KRAYT HIMSELF.....

Constructive Criticism or Praise only, no insults please. I don't expect any praise, but some constructive criticism or healthy pointers will do nicely.

Thanks!

Gee, my first two answers are the work of insultive idiots who feel they need to insult based on stereotypes, as a matter of fact, I am NOT fat and I am NOT a nerd, Star Wars is simply a hobby of mine but I think it is sad that you have to stereotype people based on their interests, I think you need help. You are very rude and immature, and I hope God doesn't crack a can of whoop-*** on your sorry souls, beyotches!

Thank you purrfectica, you seem to be the only one who is not calling me a nerd and being an ***, and plus your advice actually has some sense.

Although I am confused, purrfectica, on the way you say it is similar to the six. Sure, the last one is kind of a cliche, with the redemption and all, but keep in mind its the latest. I have actually heeded your advice and changed the ending to be less predictable. Oh wait, I never told you the ending....Whoops.

Anyway, these are just the opening crawls, they always seem to have basic similarities between them. Cheers!

no n, I have a girlfriend. As I have said, I am not a nerd. However, George Lucas, having been divorced and obsessing over a (wonderfully built) sci-fi saga, is not the one to be talking about girlfriends and nerds. Plus I know you are not really on the phone with George Lucas, I am not that stupid. Why is it that every Star Wars fan is thought of as a nerd? Its Star TREK with all the nerds, for crying out loud! And occasionally Lord of the Rings, but not always....

Um, to let you know--each additional detail was a DIFFERENT EPISODE, for those who didn't get that.

And Anakin Solo died in the books.

Answer 1

A lot of it sounds like it was taken from the expanded universe books, especially the current ones out now (Legacy of the Force 9 book series) and the comic series Legacy by Dark Horse comics. I think your stories mirror a little to close. You might want to try a different approach. Nice try though.

Answer 2

Ok, so I love star wars, and I think you have some really great ideas...but its just like the six only with a few different tactics and names. You are on the right track though adding onto the life of the characters. You should definitely right a playwrite and submit it but its very hard to do since there is a patent on the whole thing. Maybe George Lucas would read it. Follow your dreams and keep up the great work!

Answer 3

Don't give the idiots the time and attention that is missing in their lives.

My suggestion would be to develop the story and try to say more with less words in the crawl. It is kind of long.

The young lady that answered before me has the right idea about there being a patent on the franchise. But there are writers who write branching story arcs in the form of Star Wars novels. You could look into getting your story read by whomever handles such things for George Lucas.

May the force be with you.

Answer 4

actual i don't think of that is going to do fairly besides. Hardcore followers could properly be became off by using the lively variety. With the 6 massive call wars video clips...it became into like...you could watch them to get the full tale. This movie looks love that's likened to an non-obligatory text textile field on a internet variety. you could fill it out in case you prefer yet you do not could. For assessment, the different 6 video clips are like required fields.

Answer 5

Looks interesting I can only say you left out one of my favorite chacters from the books iv'e read ANAKIN SOLO the 2 son of Han and leia.

Answer 6

The blurbs that Lucas used were all three paragraphs...so you GOTTA shorten them up...

But they are great ideas...just too much going on...

If you think about it, all of his Star Wars movies are brilliant in their simplicity...so think in those terms...less is better..

Just my Opinion

Answer 7

bit long but very interesting

Answer 8

Daaannngggg...... that was long. Talk it up with Lucas

Answer 9

I got George on the phone. He thinks you have WAY too much time on your hands.... and you need a girlfriend

Answer 10

i dont like it