Rate my poem please?

Question

It was dark, saint, and I was so cold.
You were five minutes, ten minutes late,
I buried my hands in every warm fold,
And wriggled, and shivered to wait.

The streetlamp orange flickered dim,
My breath drew out smoky in air,
And all I could think of was you and him,
And the cold, and the way you don’t care.

Twenty went past and I knew that
my fingers and thoughts had gone numb,
But still, I waited, freezing, and sat,
It was forever and you didn’t come.

Answer 1

I like it. Good story, good imagery. It's the best one of these "rate my writing" things on here that I've come across. (They're usually pretty bad, which is why I hesitated to click here. Pleasant surprise.) I'd put commas around "orange" in the second stanza, first line.

Answer 2

I liked the ryme in your poem, but i think you can make it more sad. I will give you 3 out of 4.

Keep up your good work!
-G- -Hugs-

Answer 3

To me, this sounded more like a passage from a book than it did a poem. Points for the rhymes.

Answer 4

After i read it i instantly felt the emotion in the poem. Good job!

Answer 5

Its good you used words well to paint a picture.

Answer 6

Emotional and almost pointless to most people but not bad.

Answer 7

it´s good.
It rememered me of Led Zeppelin´s "Fool in the rain"

keep on going!!