Stale Cookies
You hurt me today,
Made me feel horrible.
You made my heart ache,
As you yelled at me.
My day was ruined,
All because of you.
And now I sit here,
Eating stale cookies and sour milk.
My soul is damaged,
My anger alight.
I hate you,
But I don't want to.
You made these cookies stale,
This milk sour.
You affect me,
Sometimes in good ways sometimes in bad.
My friends cheered me up a little,
Apparently you're too good for that.
No problem shattering me,
Yet you never put me back together.
My friends are my wall,
You are my tormentor.
I must mend,
With rotten cookies in your place.
Thanks for the company,
I love you too.
My friends are my cookies,
My family the milk.
Why do you ruin them?
Why do you care?
I mend here,
You hurt more.
When will it be enough?
These stale cookies, all gathered inside
2006-12-07 08:34:46 · 18 answers · asked by ~S~ is for Stephanie! 6 in Arts & Humanities ➔ Books & Authors
Please, do not be mean, just whether or not you like it, a few tips maybe. I have had a horrible day, and sat down to write. Possibly worst day of my life.... not in the mood for cynical people telling me I suck.
2006-12-07 08:36:56 · update #1
Its a good poem but it sounds like you are in alot of pain. Call a friend or get out and visit a good friend. There is no better medicine than crying on a friends shoulder.
2006-12-07 08:37:56 · answer #1 · answered by Russ D 2 · 3⤊ 0⤋
Great expression. Your poem, if read by people who really pay attention can be a wonderful encourager. You don't dwell on the fact that you were hurt without also stating that you have friends and family who can help you over the bad times. GOOD FOR YOU.
2006-12-07 16:45:26 · answer #2 · answered by john h 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Your poem made me sad for you, I hope this person that hurt you apologizes, and refrains from causing you pain again, and I am glad you have family and friends that help you feel better
2006-12-07 16:39:18 · answer #3 · answered by Gret 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I absoluetly love it! I can completely relate if you are having that problem. I think that it is very inspiring and I hope you will tell others about it. ( I think that it would sound even better than it does already if you made it rhyme!!!)
2006-12-07 16:45:38 · answer #4 · answered by Hamadryad 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Breaking short sentences into two-line stanzas does not a poem make. It's just a choppy, angry essay and a forced metaphor.
2006-12-07 16:38:07 · answer #5 · answered by LisaT 5 · 1⤊ 1⤋
Sounds good, words come from the heart.
2006-12-07 16:45:08 · answer #6 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
OMG that was Great If you have school talent shows you should SO put it in there
That is like my life it is like you wrote that just for me
2006-12-07 16:38:44 · answer #7 · answered by Mandy M 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I think it is very good & quite epressive. I think we have all had days and/or people like that in our lives. Soak yourself in happiness & avoid people who vex your soul. You are too creative to be around them.
2006-12-07 16:40:54 · answer #8 · answered by life coach 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
EXELLENT! I feel exactly the same way all the time. Its like you wrote that poem just for me. I love it. Wonderful job!:)
2006-12-07 16:38:31 · answer #9 · answered by Crissy 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
dont listen to mean people, its cool, punky, cute, i love it. youll feel better after a while, stop worrying. itll all get better. Ive had those days....
2006-12-10 21:45:55 · answer #10 · answered by Jenny(: 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋