OLD THINGS
As a young woman,
I’d wander around my mother’s home
and find corners of distressed clutter
which begged for brown-papered flight
to naked people who'd find God
in piles of old clothes.
The Bakelite burner failed
to enlighten as to why my mother
was so moved by Depression glass
in boxes of cornflakes.
Peach silk lingered with faded crepe,
and frayed scraps of lacy veils
unravelled long dead vows.
Utility brides poised on council steps
armed with big eared men, geared
for civilisation in bags of grey twill,
the lonely Irish
hearts flapping
in the English wind.
Later, a faded affair
freed from oak drawers, creaky
with dirt. An unknown French hand
elegant in blue italics,
runs wet on wet.
She never understood resistance.
A silk stocking lying stale.
Its partner lost.
As an old woman, I wander.
2006-12-07 06:53:10 · 9 answers · asked by MissRemorse 2 in Arts & Humanities ➔ Books & Authors
What wonderful images - I especially like your first full stanza, with the line "naked people who'd find God in piles of old clothes."
Needs reading more than once.
Gets better each time.
Great last line, too.
Thank you. What a nice discovery on a dark afternoon.
2006-12-07 07:36:25 · answer #1 · answered by Uncle John 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Very colorful and imaginative. This is actually not bad. Seriously, I'm not sucking up for some points, I really don't need them. I am usually very critical of so-called "poetry" posted here because it's very often really, really bad. I like your poem a lot. You have talent and a vocabulary and you know how to use it. Good job.
2006-12-07 06:58:59 · answer #2 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
I expected to write a silly comment, but I actually like your poem. Good work.
2006-12-07 07:00:07 · answer #3 · answered by Daedalus 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Very nice! I especially enjoy your good use of alliteration. Keep writing, but I like this as is.
2006-12-07 06:59:19 · answer #4 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
Very good! So descriptive and imaginitive! Keep it up. I bet you'll be famous some day.
2006-12-07 07:01:40 · answer #5 · answered by Cindy P 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
This is great...you have what is takes!!! I would submit this...the New Yorker takes poetry submissions and if chosen it would be great for your portfolio!!!
2006-12-07 07:28:55 · answer #6 · answered by MELONIE T 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Wow wat a bueatiful poem u made, i like it its so unhappy like if u choose that somebody by using ur edge yet u dont have them yet wow ur astonishing 10/10 and that i like all the words u placed very very superb :) ~ ciara
2016-10-17 22:59:06 · answer #7 · answered by ? 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Its great! Best of luck to you!
2006-12-07 07:35:46 · answer #8 · answered by Ralph 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
awesome
2006-12-07 06:57:11 · answer #9 · answered by willow 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋