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We will go over the waterfalls swimming like we’ve never swam before
Over the mountains we’ll find our dreams make them come true and live on free
Nothing will stop us no not a thing so keep on singing like an angle without any wings
And I bet you that the stars will come out shooting off like a bullet and disappear right through the night
So come, come with me I’ll show you the way will go our distance to find the trail that will make us fly will glide right along into the sky
And yet you see it will just be you and me
So come along will go over the waterfalls swimming in the crystal clear water
And over the mountains will find our dreams make them come true and live on free
And yet no one is stopping us and it just you and me so come along with me
2006-12-06 13:35:09 · 14 answers · asked by Anonymous in Arts & Humanities ➔ Other - Arts & Humanities
umm, i think you need to omit the words waterfalls/mountains/trails
The waterfalls/mountains/trails make it cheesy...but other than that it's pretty good.
Try going for words that are less physical and more emotional or something
(for example line 3 is: Over the mountains we’ll find our dreams make them come true and live on free
maybe more like: Someday we’ll find our dreams make them come true and live on free)
2006-12-06 14:52:48 · answer #1 · answered by Sarah 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
if you wrote that for your girlfriend she ll love you!it could be a great song!but i think you should work on the words you use!try live freely instead of live on free and probably you mean eagle not angle!however it was great full of emotions and pictures!very dreamy and keep tryin'!!!
2006-12-07 13:28:59 · answer #2 · answered by *Forever J.* 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I like it. Kinda takes you away from all your worries. Makes you feel at peace. I think it would be great as a song. Thumbs up to you. Keep writing!
2006-12-06 21:39:40 · answer #3 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 1⤋
Yes very nice! No Lying but you should be famous if you wrote that song. Love ya
2006-12-06 21:37:54 · answer #4 · answered by ♥Miley Cyrus♥ 1 · 0⤊ 1⤋
ummmm a bit long coudnt you shorten it a bit may sound better if it rhymed a bit to
soz but you did ask
2006-12-06 21:37:05 · answer #5 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 0⤋
Good job! How long did it take you to write it?
2006-12-10 11:20:08 · answer #6 · answered by Jennifer C. 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
HOLY! you actually wrote this song?!?!?
it is fantastic!
turn it into the internet!
youll get cash!
this song is amazing!
2006-12-06 21:38:25 · answer #7 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 1⤋
that was a great one.
but i did noy read it completely
2006-12-07 07:52:35 · answer #8 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
nice sooo beautiful
2006-12-06 21:37:15 · answer #9 · answered by Kansas Jedi 2 · 0⤊ 1⤋
i love it. it is deep, romantic, but not too romantic, something i wish someone would write me!
2006-12-06 21:39:11 · answer #10 · answered by DarkReaper 1 · 0⤊ 1⤋